Jab We Met

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Cover: 8/10

I actually really like the cover. I think it fits the story of acquaintances very well. The picture is clear to see and it relates. The words are also easy to see and read which is very nice.

Title: 4/10

I’m not sure what the title means. At first glance, it confuses me because I don’t know what ‘jab’ stands for. I feel an explanation may be in order because it might confuse others just as it did for me.

Prologue: 2/15

It’s not much of a description because it’s only an explanation. Readers are told why the author decided to write the story. Also, it lacks mechanical skills like no spaces after punctuation. Dialogue needs work also.

Grammar/Punctuation: 2/5

It could use a large brush-up. There’s a lack of spaces after periods, commas, etc. It makes reading very hard and could use a lot of work. Furthermore, the wording is often off so it makes reading a bit hard because I have to read back through it. 

Characters: 10/25

There’s not really any character development at all. This isn’t an actual story. But I will say that I find it cute and lovely that the author chose to write about their friends and how they met. But again, there’s not really any development from what I can see.

Story: 15/35

I think the idea of a memoir is nice. I just feel this isn’t something that deserves promotion yet. First, the grammar issues need to be worked out so readers understand what they’re reading. Next, it needs to be fleshed out a bit more because it’s confusing to read sometimes. 

Overall: 41/100

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Sky

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