MY ADORABLE SHOP 01 (CLOSED)
This shop will help you to improve your writing skills though I'm not that professional.And it will help you to gain more reads,votes,comments,and lastly followers.
The perks of this shop?
-Gain more readers and follower...
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Disclaimer: These are solely intented for the betterment and improvement of your story. If you think my words are below to belt then try to DM me,so we could talk privately. Thank you!
CAUTION: SPOILERS AHEAD
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• I gave you a 86 points, simply because I like how their lovestory went. Most common in Wattpad world but you make it better and different. The synopsis was quite short but it's good. And the book cover was good also, it's very attractive which is a big advantage. I don't know where did you get the title, because I haven't finish your story pa naman. So, the prologue was too short for me, you should add something. I don't have any problems on the characters because chapter one palang may description na sila. The names was unique for me especially kay Selene na ka-name ko. Btw, hopefully Henry can find another girl. Wala siyang chance kay Selene, just kidding. I just have a little problem of how you write. Stop to double the letters instead of saying "ghurlll" it's better if "girl". It's okay if sa chats or texts siya but if hindi naman. Avoid to do that. And you should start using (') this one if you'll going to make the word, shorter.
Iyung: - It's ('yung) not (yung) Ano: - It's ('no) not (no/noh)
Also, stop using 'HAHAHA' if nasa isip lang ng character 'yung sasabihin niya. Here's the example, if you don't get what I mean.
Wrong: - Baka araw arawin ko na dito. Char mukha naman 'kong patay gutom sa dessert HAHAHA
Correct: - Baka araw arawin ko na dito. Char mukha naman 'kong patay gutom sa dessert. I giggled on that thought.
It's just my opinion, if that's your style or if that's how you write a story. I don't mind, i'm just giving my opinions here. And I've seen a lot of grammatical errors on your story, but it's not completed/edited pa naman, so okay lang.
But overall it's nice and good. Just keep on writing, aspiring Author.
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