Axelle | Salutatorian Wars

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by thebridgesociety

by thebridgesociety

Author: JustNicole0001

Reviewer: ItsmeAxelle_

Chapters reviewed: 5

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Cover and title :

Really nice title, the cover is not eye catching and I would highly recommend you change it!

Blurb :

Wow! This is a very good blurb and the intensity just shows through the blurb really well!!
I could feel the rivalry, the tone was set, very nice job with the blurb!

Characters :

Very nicely done! I could actually see how similar they were, but yet so different. Both of them are really described well.

I love how all the characters are so different from each other!!

Arlen, Marissa and Alison too are written really well. You have a commendable job at structuring them, and all the character traits! Really nice!

Writing technicalities and grammar:

Your grammar is good, really nice words you have used in places, loving the tone of the book! However :

• I feel there's a slight confusion on which character is talking when, and what action is a character doing, you could easily fix that with a proper editing session!

• I love your characters, but you could work on your descriptions of people, like how they look, the places, the state of mind etc.!

• Your book has quite an intense premise and I would love it you tried to bring in more intensity into the dialogues and also the settings of the book! It's a great storyline and therefore I expect a whole lot more from the writing!

Final words :

You have incredible potential and I am in love with all your writing bits! It's a very intricate plot which needs more detailing, and you have the talent to go on and make this book a huge success!!❤

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Axelle.