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Axelle | Lethal Ways to not kill yourself

Author: DocileFiasco

Reviewer: ItsmeAxelle_

Chapters reviewed: 7

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Hey there! You're insanely talented!!!!

First Impressions:

Cover: This is the only thing that's having like a major major major problem!
Well, the cover is cute.
But for a book like yours, I felt its too cute.
The light blue aesthetic and face claims are beautifully done, but the title and the knife are kinda off-putting.
I mean its quite clever but it looks like a poster for a band or some wallpaper but not as a Book cover.
So I highly recommend you can go for some dark themed or some really mysterious cover, although you could make it interesting and colourful too, totally up to you, this cover is, unfortunately, not the one!

Title: Brilliant! Its spikes the interest of readers from the very first word. Great job!😄

Blurb: Such a wonderful Blurb, I was literally so engrossed in reading it, I couldn't wait to start reading the book!
Perfect!🔅❣

Plot:

Your plot is one, that makes me sit on the edge of my chair like all the time!!
How do you even think of such an intricately planned plot🥺❤
I was in awe at the backstory prologue, the mentions of the characters, the way Elikai and Kal are woven into the story so seamlessly, and of course all the mentions of real-life references😂

I really enjoyed your storyline, the pace is perfect, tone of the book, everything regarding the plotline is phenomenal!!

You're doing a wonderful job girl!

Characters:

Fan. Like a real big-time fan.
Kal, Elikai, Alex, Kassy are going to stay with me for a long time!
They are such diverse characters, such vibrant personalities, I can't get my head around the fact that they are just book characters😢

I am literally in awe of their story!

I could feel the angst, the pain, the sadness of Kal🥺
You've written him so well!

Elikai's love, his hesitation, flustered moods! I am in love with this adorable human🥺❤

Alex and Kassy❣

I have no words now.

Writing technicalities and grammar:

•TYPOS

Well, they aren't like major misspells or anything, just small ones which can be easily fixed through Grammarly or a thorough editing session.
Some tense mistakes and stuff too, although for the chapters I read, I put a '🐧' in the paragraphs where I saw typos, just so you could find them yourself😁
Other paragraphs I had pointed out too!

•Something related to breaks.

Like I think I mentioned in one of your chapters, Kal said 'ouch' and then immediately started his dialogue.

Well, its nothing major but since the book has like so much potential, and can make waves, taking care of small details could really go a longgggg wayy!

By this point, I also refer to the previous such stuff, like:

Damn.

"So how to do.."

Something like this in all aspects!😊

•Paragraph breaks in general

Really good! Like from the breaks in narration to the overall story structure!

Really nicely done😄

Writing Style:

Do I even have to say anything?
Damn, you make a poet shy bro😂

Such good descriptions, such good buildup, trust me this book is already a winner!❤

You know, this book has the potential to be as good as 'F.A.I.T.H by JoPRBooks'

And believe me, that book is definitely the best book to have ever been written!
Your book is phenomal!

Final words:

I have loved reading it, work hard on this, find elements which can be bettered, go all out in this book!!

You are gonna go places!

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Hope you found it helpful!

Signing off,
Axelle.