Friends From Beginning To End (Adam X Justin)

hey guys

Hey my Unknowns! I made this creative writing piece for my English class and I think it has really good potential for a good book/story. I was limited to two pages but here it is:
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“Hey Lili!” I exclaimed when they finally picked up their phone.
  “Hey Taylor, sorry I didn't pick up the first 10 times you called me.” Lili said, chuckling at the end.
   “Sorry not sorry,” i said, “anyways what are you doing Saturday?” I asked. 
   “Remember i got that ticket to go see the London Eye!” Lili said excitedly.
    “All by yourself?” I asked a little worried.
    “Ya? Something wrong with that?” Lili asked.
    “Not my fault if you get kidnapped Lils.” I said , smiling a bit.
    “Ok, bye Taylor see you Sunday.” she said, hanging up the call.
    “Ok bye…” i said shortly after she hung up, i couldn’t help but get a feeling. A bad feeling in my gut.
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  It was now Sunday and Lili hasn’t called me back yet, I was starting to get worried about them. I picked up my phone and clicked their contact. It rang once, twice, three times, then i was hit with, “Hello this is Lili and you’ve reached my voicemail, i'm probably sleeping, sleeping, sleeping, or worst case scenario I’ve been taken by aliens.” their voicemail told me. Then I decided to call one of my other friends, Nicholas. “Sup.” he said.
  “Hey Nick, have you seen Lili?” i asked hoping that he has and i'm just being paranoid.
   “Sorry I haven't seen them since Friday,” he said sympathetically.
    “Frick what if she got kidnapped?” I said worried.
    “Don’t worry we’ll find her.” Nick said.
    “Thanks Nicky, maybe we can also bring your boyfriend.” i said bring up our other friend, Jay who Nicholas very obviously has a crush on.
    “No he’s not my boyfriend.” he said. “But we probably should because he’s really good at finding stuff out.” he finished with an audible blush on his face.
    “Ok loverboy calm your blush down and call him about the situation.” I said.
    “Fine bye Taylor Tot.” he said, calling me the nickname that I have because I'm really short (5’1).
    “Quit calling me that!” I softly yelled before hanging up on him. I waited 30 minutes before Nick, and Jay video called me, “hey lovebirds.” i said after i picked up.
    “Oh quiet you.” Jay said, blushing a bit.
    “Anyways, what are we gonna do?” Nick said butting in.
    “How about we all meet at the London Eye in 15 minutes?” Jay asked.
    “Wait JJ, where are you?” I asked.
    “We’re on this school trip. I thought I might explore a bit, so i'm at a cafe near the London Eye.” he explained.
    “Is it perfect for a date?” I asked singingly.
    “T-Taylor!” Jay yelled at me. “Just meet me here in 15-20 minutes, we need to find Lili as soon as possible.” he explained.
    “On it!” i said hanging up.
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    It's been 16 minutes and I walked up to Jay and Nick who were sitting at a table, Nick listening to Jay talk. Jay saw me first since Nick was too focused on Jay’s face. “Ah Taylor finally!” Jay said and Nick looked behind himself to see me walking up to them.
“Hey guys!” I said.
“No time for random banter we have to search all over if we want to find Lili.” Nick said getting serious.
“I think we should split and work, you two and I shall work by myself.” i said , starting to walk off.
“No way we are all working together.” Nick said getting up, grabbing my hoodie sleeve and pulling me to a chair sitting me down into it. “So where are we gonna look first?” Nick questioned looking at Jay.
“I think we should look at the Eye before anything else.” Jay said, looking Nick in the eyes.
“Let us go then!” i said standing up and then Jay and Nick following suit. We walked all over the place for them. Finally after 30 minutes of searching, Nick went into an ally and yelled to us, “GUYS COME HERE!!” Jay and I looked at each other and walked over to where he was to see Nick full of relief and concern. We looked to where he was looking, to find a passed out Lili.
“Lili!” I exclaimed, running up to them. After 10 minutes she started to wake up. “Lili, Lili are you ok?” I asked.
“What happened.” they said.
“No idea, but you are never coming here alone again.” i breathed happy to have my friend back.
“Haha deal.” they said laughing a bit.
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I'm not sure how it looks to you guys but I think this would be a good book please comment if you think so bye my Unknowns and stay safe!!
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