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Title : It is a very peculiar title unless one knows its meaning. Esoteric Beacon, which literally translates into an understanding signal if said in simple words. The meaning is very deep because the key of living is understanding be it in sweet love or a raged war. And this one I can definitely say is an out of the box thinking for a title and even a risky one because readers might find it difficult to understand and may skip it, but the plus point is few may find it strangely interesting and give it a chance. This is absolutely called playing on fire! (On a suggestive note, I would recommend changing the title into alphabets instead of symbols because it may be a difficult probability in finding it in a symbolic way because Wattpad works on tag searches which are determined by alphabetical words)
Cover : One could say it is expressing beauty in a sexy way, which makes it look dark and alluring. But if I don't talk about the font style it would be injustice to the cover. The font is a bit difficult to understand because of it's style which is giving it a chic look rather than the view you want to portray. Maybe a little work with it and the arrangement of text will make it glitter.
Blurb : I am envious of your choice of luring the readers into the story, a mysterious sneak peek! You know us too well because once when we read something a vague part of brain keeps thinking – why was the situation like that? What could have happened after that? And, that is how you engage readers into thinking about the epidemics of the story and why to look forward to it. That could not have been better than that, awesome. The way you presented the world of magic was absolutely stunning!
Analysis and Evaluation –
Plot : It's really very much research work and a difficult job in visualizing up an extremely detailed set up of a place and time we haven't lived in. It's easier to write something contemporary because we are surviving in this era of time so it is really impressive how you had put every detail together and in place to arrange the best line for the story. Your presentation of the time, season, months, calendar is very pleasuring and deep to the core which makes it interesting. I would like to add this point that at once it is too much information, which is all excitingly new, in the esoteric element chapter to grasp which might put away few easygoing readers – meaning it might give a wrong impression of the extremities of the magical world which may become difficult to understand. Maybe try a little simplified version which can hook up the reader quickly.
Characters : The characters in the Esoteric world are a bit complex and very appreciable because they are round in nature which gives them a scope of characteristic development throughout the story.
I really liked the brotherhood period of Walor and Zwisk, that makes readers feel relatable to protective siblings who are there for eternity with them, it was touching but then history is witnessed from every era of brotherly rivalry. This may be out of context right now but Walor is a good father. Then there is Rivard's character like the stone wall of the story, keeping things together for our dear emperor.
There are other amazing characters out there which I would prefer keeping a secret for the readers to go and check them out.
Descriptions : You have used this area very well in your favor. Like you really have an upper hand here and if you improve a bit on giving more to the scene, like a good balance between the characters involvement and pickle touch of what is even happening then that will open the imagination of the reader as if living the characters of either of the friends. And once you ace that there is no stopping for you from becoming a pro!
Sensory flow : This is a little something sometimes we all need to work on with. There are few readers who like to enjoy the emotion and then move on to what is going to happen next. This is where I would request you to read the story yourself again and see where are the times you are jumping emotions, like one minute you are talking about something and the next it becomes something else. It would be nice to have a balanced equation between fast and slow pace, like a medium.
Vocabulary, Grammar and Punctuation : Being a writer I understand how messy sometimes we become when updating in haste, not because we aren't good at it but instead it is for the reason that we want to express the best to the readers so that they could enjoy the journey. I loved your dialogue deliveries very much but they were minimum in count or we can say we had much of descriptions(supporting sentences around). And the scope for you to improve is in the punctuation point. Not serious issues but once you give a onceover read to the chapters you will automatically polish and filter them. Grammar at times did go out of place maybe due to the confusion of the situation, but again if not improve now than when!
Conclusion and suggestions -
I would suggest to start the story chapters right away after the 2nd published part. Few readers may lose interest in the copyright chapter, because we are here for the story, so you can add it in the last or just secure your story rights in the settings (on wattpad web version) Also the chapters you put as a glossary sort of way felt like a whole load of info at a point. My honest suggestion is maybe adding the information in the flow of the story as exposition because a lot of people skip it and head into the story. Sometimes it gets confusing not knowing the meaning of everything which was explained before. But it's just a suggestion from my side
Tags can be our lucky tokens, so it is sometimes a smart move to include some lucky tags which can bring the story in light of any tag lists or hotlist.
It would really be interesting if you introduced one of your characters in the blurb because a story cannot be based completely on an idea unless we have characters in them.
Anyways, the end line is the story was captivating in its own way.
