MASTERPIECE AWARDS 2021 [Season 1]

ROUND 4 RESULT[part 2]

MASTERPIECE AWARDS 2021
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CRITERIA FOR JUDGING IN ROUND 4
[Story Prologue/First part of the story(20%)]

Interest Catcher- 5%
Imaginary and visual description-5%
Punctuation:5%
Grammar and Spelling: 5%
Total Rate: 20%

THIS ARE THE CRITIQUES AND RATINGS TO MYSTERY/THRILLER, HORROR, AND SCIENCE FICTION FICTION CATEGORY FOR ROUND 4❕

DISCLAIMER: THE JURIES OF THIS BOOK AWARD ARE HONESTLY, CLEARLY, AND PROFESSIONALLY RATED AND JUDGED THE ENTRIES WITH NO BIAS. THEREFORE WHATEVER THE RESULT OF YOUR MASTERPIECE TO THIS ROUND, ACCEPT IT NICELY. THANKS❕

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MYSTERY/THRILLER CATEGORY

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TITLE: It All Ends Here
GENRE: Mystery/Thriller
AUTHOR: WYXZIN

JURY #1: Tisayslayer (Tisayslayer WP)
RATINGS
• Interest catcher: 2%
• Imaginary and visual description: 3%
• Punctuation: 3%
• Grammar and Spelling: 4%
TOTAL RATE: 12%

COMMENTS/FEEDBACKS/CRITIQUES:
——Bago mo basahin ang aking kritika, tandaan ang mga ito:
• You’re the one who decides what changes you should make to improve your works.
• Remind yourself that I criticizing your work, not you.
—Dito ko naramdaman ‘yong na-akit na ko—pero nawala ‘yong pagka-interasado ko—dahil sa prologue mo. Your prologue is not a progolue; kaya nawalan ako ng interes.
—Prologue is not a blurb. Instead na eksena ang dapat ko mabasa ay blurb ang nabasa ko. Basta detective, naaakit ako pero hindi mo nailagay sa tama ang nais mong ipahiwatig kaya ang ending nakawawalang-interes (para sa ‘kin).
—Ang prologo ay eksenang na nangyari na or mangyayari pa lang. Ang mahalaga ay may koneksyon ito sa plot at sa mga susunod na chapter. Huwag maglalagay ng prologue para lang may mailagay. Alamin muna kung ano ba talaga ang dapat na nilalaman nito.
—Kung nag-umpisa sa lahat no’ng namatay ang sister niya; I suggest na ayon ang gawin mong prologue. ‘Yong eksenang namatay ‘yong sister niya; anong nangyari? Bakit namatay? Ano ang setting ng eksenang namatay ang sister niya? Ano’ng nangyayari sa paligid no’ng may namatay? Answer all these questions; makakagawa ka ng “totoong” prologue.
—‘Wag tayo basta “lagay” lang, alamin kung saan ba ito dapat “ilagay” at kung para saan ba.
—Last, ito ang tamang quotations marks (“ ”) not this (" ").
—That’s all.✨

JURY #2: (Ms. Unknown)
RATINGS
Interest Catcher: 3.5%
Imaginary and Visual Description: 3.0%
Puntuation: 3.5%
Grammar/Spelling: 3.5%
TOTAL RATE: 13.5%
COMMENTS/FEEDBACKS/CRITIQUES:

Prologue is fine, nabitin lang ako. (Char)
Anyways, it's something new for me. Nakaka-thrill sa kung anong mangyayari next part. I also like the detective something* kaya nakuha n'ya 'yung interest ko kahit papanu.

Kung may dapat lang na ayusin ay siguro 'yung ilang grammar nalang. Medyo nakakalito kasi nung iba. But again, it was a nice story. Make a proofread nalang. Edit and revised and it will be good.

Great job!

TOTAL AVERAGE RATE:12.75%