Book: Prisoner
Author: Infanta2021
Genre: Romantic
COVER
So, I'm going to start with the cover. I wasn't a big fan of it. I don't think it looked very appealing or stood out enough. The cover is supposed to intrigue the reader. If the cover isn't attractive, no matter how good your work is, it will be hard to get readers. I'm sure you're more than capable of finding graphic shops but If you need any recommendations feel free to PM me <33
BLURB
Let me start with the blurb. I think it was good but I feel like it could use some patching up and work done on it. Also I spotted a few mistakes in there, minimal, but still there.
Original: A rich girl and the Mafias daughter and a tattoo bad guy.
Edited: Mafia's daughter, extremely rich and a tattooed bad boy.
Also be sure to mention what mafia they are in, e.g. American, Italian...
CHAPTER 1
So digging deep into the first chapter, the only mistake i could find was the sentence\dialogue structure.
Original: I sat down and I said "What's going on?"
Edited: I sat down and I said, "What's going on?"
There are many places like this in the chapters, and they need fixing.
OVERALL
I think it was a good piece. With some editing here and there, it can be at its best standard! Good luck with your future works <33
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