hate you lots | s. heizou ✓

my errors with this fic and how i plan to mend them

hi guys!!! 4 chapters left omggg

i would first like to start off by saying thank you. from the bottom of my heart, thank you to anyone who took the time to read this, leave votes, or even leave funny comments to read. literally half the time i spend on wattpad is refreshing my notifs just to see of any of you guys left comments because you guys are literally so funny and supportive. i probably wouldve had the most vanilla boring summer even if you guys didn't take the time to read my stuff and leave comments. every message left on my board, every funny remark, every theory, every compliment makes my day a whole lot brighter. i was so excited when i learned that you guys were theorizing! i never would've expected this overwhelming amount of support in my wildest dreams. again, i love you all sm.

also, i noticed that i made so many mistakes with this fic. in my future works, i'd like to fix them. here's a few that i noticed:

- heizou lost his charm way too early: heizou is typically described as a flirty, funny character. i didnt use this to my advantage for some dumb reason, and decided to make him into more of a serious protective character. i should've built more on his flirty side.

- heizou is totally dumbed down here: in these past few chapters, i noticed that i wrote down that many of the other characters are making most of the discoveries. this is supposed to be more of a heizou-demonstrating-his-smarts fic. it's come to the point where i desperately need to redeem heizou in these last four chapters.

- i came off wayyy too strong in chapter 2: cough cough PROJECTING. little 7th grade me didnt know what to do with her trauma so sje wrote it into a genshin fic thats crazy 💀💀💀💀💀. i realize that i may have scared off readers, and that is a problem on its own, so i shouldve probably inserted a chapter like this in the later chapters or literally never lmao

- the relationship burned WAYY too quick: for an academic rivalry book, there was like maybe 2 seconds of any academic rivalry and that was in the first chapter. i shouldve made y/n a bit more stern and less tolerant towards heizou, as well as include more school scenes.

- i shouldve storyboarded this entire fic: if i told you that this entire story was based on impulse decisions i made up in the moment it wouldnt be too hard to believe considering how all over the place this fic is. i need to make a concrete plan for fics like this from now on.

- balancing mystery and romance: i LOVEEE mystery romance stories. however, i did a terrible job with this one. name the last heizou x y/n moment in this story. right. the last major moment between heizou and y/n was literally that kiss and thats abt it. i need to figure our how to balance these two components better in a story.

- better approaches to this story: i could've approached the story like this sm better. for example, witchcraft is mentioned in the beginning of the story, possibly as a rumor or some sort. y/n hates heizou and is constantly competing with him. at some point, one of y/n friend's gets hurt or someone w connections to y/n gets hurt. y/n has to rely on heizou, and solves the mystery with him, slowly falling in love with him.

- y/n's character development is really inconsistent and crappy: woahhhhhhh y/n cusses in the early chapters 😱 bffr. i could've developed a whole lot of these characters sm better and i wish i storyboarded this.

- xiao and hu tao's relationship is WAY too prevalent in the story: i love xiao too guys and hu tao's one of my favs. i heard this ship was super popular so yk i had to write it. theyre side characters tho. heizou x reader should be the main focus in this story.

- thoma literally fucking EVAPORATED: where'd thoma go. i literally forgot about his ass. i need to carry some sort of character list so i know how to approach this better

- the kiss scene was awkward: i've read way too much ao3 😭 but somehow, i am still unable to write satisfactory kissing scenes. reading over the kiss scene, it's incredibly cringe worthy. i need to practice a lot more with it.

- MEDIOCREEEEE BOOOOO: my writing is stuffed with dialogue and barely any descriptions. half the time, i doubt anyone could even tell where the characters were. i need to work on that much more.

- crappy mystery: omg guys a witch is at this school i wonder who it is.!?!??!???!}! if i could slap my older self i would 100%. if anything, i'd tell myself to rewrite the entire thing and storyboard it. there's so many better approsches to a plot like this that couldve left room for wayyy more heizou x y/n moments along with a better and more developed mystery.

i promise to improve my writing guys 😭 im so sorry if this story was in any way cringeworthy, and i hope i didnt scare u guys off ever. i love you guys from the bottom of my heart and i wanna improve for you all so you can all read good stuff instead of something with little thought put into it. for my next book, i have a better idea on how to develop the relationship and i promiseeee it wont be as mediocre as this one.

i love heizou but i did him so dirty w this fic bro 😭😭😭😭😭

besides that, TYSM FOR 3K READS. I LOVE YOU ALL SM(ut special?)

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