The cover matches the theme in one way but in another way it doesn't give the feel that the story is about Namjoon's depression. The cover gives a really happy Vibe
The cover is really messy. The words are overlapping with one another. The light white words are on the top of the dark white snowflake Because of that overlapping no word can be read properly. And on the corner many other things are also written which is making the cover look messy
Title : 9/10
The title matches the story and it is nice
But there was no need to use full stops
Story description : 9/10
Gives us enough information about the story and raises curiosity. Nicely written
But it will better if you use full stops after ending one sentence. The whole thing looks like written in one sentence, when it isn't
Concept or plot : 9.5/10
Even though at first glance it gave me a funny story vibe but when I started reading I understand that it was a story with very deep meaning. It was a healing kind of story. Recovering from mental trauma concept is a good topic and I liked it very much
Pace : 10/10
Pace is fine. It goes well with the flow
Character development : 10/10
Characters were relatable. As Namjoon had depression, the things he felt was realistic. What the members done for namjoon was really heart warming
Grammar or vocabulary : 9/10
I didn't found any mistakes. But in one line you might have missed one sentence and went to another one
Writing style : 5/10
When authors normally us narrative styles writing, they mostly describe emotions, surroundings, more and use less dialogues. The dialogues are also written in big sentences
But for your book, it was mostly dependant on dialogues and the dialogues were written in small sentences or sometimes only in one word As a result that ( he said, I said ) felt really repetitive Story would have been better if it was written in a dialogue style or even if it was written in narrative style, dialogues were written in big sentences and had less ( I said, he said )
Matching the given Genre : 9.5/10
It matches the genre
Overall enjoyment : 7.5/10
It was really nice story I liked seeing members helping Namjoon to overcome his sadness. It has some connection with reality and you talked about some really good points . The way you talked about mental trauma was nice and I could connect with the characters
It will be nice if you talked about some problems directly that Namjoon was facing. Like instead of Just saying he got hate comments if you said little more about what the hate really was, the story would have been more impactful
You don't need to us full stops while writing the name of chapters or story. It looks better without them
The cover and writing style needs to improve
On the first chapter the photo you used, Seokjin Face was kind of destroyed. It will be better if you change it
I liked reading this book. It was emotional and members singing magic shop for Namjoon was beautiful
Keep going, you are doing good 🩷🩷
Total : 83 /100
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