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KISMET'S GAMBLE

Hi, ClaussyGOfficial, this is Critic Skeletoon again, I would like to kindly remind you that while I have a sincere passion for reading, I must acknowledge that I am not professionally trained or exceptionally gifted in writing. However, I am committed to offering my honest opinions and insights. It is important to note that my suggestions are based solely on my perspective and understanding. I recognize that I may overlook certain flaws or fail to meet your expectations. Ultimately, the decision to heed my advice rests entirely with you.

In addition, I'd like to emphasize that my critique of your book differs from my previous approach because it's essential to address the concerns within your story.

Let's begin! 🎊

TITLE OF THE STORY
Kismet's Gambit

Nagustuhan ko ang pamagat ng kwento mo. Una, dahil nagtataka ako kung ano ba ang ibig sabihin ng Kismet, hindi familiar sa akin ang terminolohiyang ito [I googled it to learn the definition of Kismet] at panglawa, dahil hindi pangkaraniwan ang pamagat ng kwento mo.

In my understanding, Kismet's Gambit denotes a daring or risky action guided by fate or luck, where someone takes a gamble to achieve a positive result. Is that correct? Correct me if I am wrong.

Kismet means Fate [According to Google]
Gambit means a strategy, move, or initial statement, often involving some risk, designed to gain an advantage.

Adding on, while the fantasy impact might be somewhat dwindled in your title, I appreciate the sense of urgency and mystery conveyed by your title.

I love the title. 9/10 👍👍👍

BLURB OF THE STORY

ORIGINAL BLURB

Si Ravier Salazar ay isang ordinaryong mortal na magsisilbing boses ng mga katulad niya. Sa kabila ng mapanghusgang salitang laban sa kaniya, pagmamahal ang iginanti niya. Ang malambot niyang puso ay nag-udyok sa kaniyang mahumaling sa kapwa-lalaking may mahal nang iba.

Si Amelia Jacintha Delos Santos naman, may kapangyarihang makapagtutupad ng anumang kahilingan. Doon sa kakaibang mundong kaniyang ginagalawan, ang baguhin ang kapalaran ng mortal sa totoong mundo ay kinakailangan.

There is a tale where fate can intertwine people of different worlds-a story where fantasy can break the limitations of reality. Sa kabiguang iniyakan ni Ravier, Amelia gave him a chance to twist the destiny in his favor. To pay the price of this gamble, they must take an untaken kismet.

While the initial paragraph of your blurb did test my patience, I chose to view it as constructive criticism and a challenge for me. Despite this temptation, I decided to remained composed, focusing instead on my goal of delivering an objective and methodically organized evaluation of your story.