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The Temple Unleashed [Iris]

Book: The Temple Unleashed
Author: Avid-ReaderOrWriter
Reviewer: Iamjustasapien 
Chapters read: 9

Cover:
The cover is just awesome! I don't have words to say how beautiful it is. The snake wraping along the key really gives off the feeling of a fantasy/mysterious book. The font size, colour and shape is just perfect! There are no changes required, it's perfect. The cover designer really did a spectacular job!

Title:
'The Temple Unleashed' is a interesting title choice. I personally, loved it. It's short but really eye-catching. It peaks interest and curiosity in readers and makes them want to explore your book more. It does not immediately give the storyline and is quite appt. It's perfect!

Blurb:
"When a terrible power is awakened and unleashed in Ivaldah, who will stop the horror and terror it'll cause?"

Is a good start! Starting off with a question really catches ones attention. As a reader, once I read your blurb, I wanted to explore your book. The blurb was just that good, it was perfect. It gives the readers a vague idea of what's about to happen and has no grammatical errors. However, there is a small mistake:

"No one expects two teen..."

Correction: "No one expects two teens..."

Except this, everything else is perfect! Good job!

Plot:
The plot is quite realistic and had the slice of life many look for. Moreover, one can easily connect them together. I love how realistic the plot is, many can relate to Kat's personality. The scenes are described wonderfully, and is just perfect. The pacing of the story is good, not too fast nor too slow. Although, this story is relatively new and has few chapters, I just know that, this will reach heights! Good job!

Character development:
Since, there are a few chapters, I can't tell much about the chracter development. But I have to admit the originality and uniqueness of your characters is a huge plus point in your book. For example, Asher and Jordan. Those two are just little crackheads! They are such fun characters!  They really had a lot of humor to your book.

I personally, loved each and every character of your book. Even if they don't come for most of the chapters, they do last a long effect on readers. For example, Dr. Damaris, she was such a mysterious character! She really caught my interest. Hope we get to see her in the near future! They way you write them, their interactions, or gestures is just remarkable. I have no complaints against your plot, it's just perfect. Never stop writing!

Grammer and vocabulary:
Well, well, here is were most stumble. But you don't, the sentence formation is correct and there are no grammatical errors. I was personally, shocked to find no mistakes in the grammar or sentence formation. You did misplace a few commas here and there, but apart form that, everything else is perfect! Additionally, I recommend splitting the paragraphs into smaller ones for easy reading.

Improvements needed to be done:
As mentioned above, there are not grammatical mistakes. Just try not using commas often and split the paragraphs into smaller ones.

Overall Enjoyment:
The originality and realistic plotline is a huge plus point of your book. The writing style is really good and gives a vivid image in the reader's mind. The characters's originality and uniqueness really hooks the readers. I really recommend you to participate in contests to gain recognition that you deserve! Overall, this book has some minor errors and has a huge potential to outshine all! Never stop writing! Thank you.

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