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Review Of: The Stepfather's Curse

The Stepfather's Curse By Zoey_Knight_Vamp

Introduction: 7

Although the introduction gave me the information to tell enable me to read on, it didn’t seem to grip me, it just managed to keep me reading long enough to continue to chapter. It needed to grab my attention straight away.

Characters: 5

They didn’t really develop, you described something at the beginning that she is not but other than that there was nothing really to go by. Without adding the description you don’t add the depth to the characters, they just remained quite lifeless with the way you had written them. Fortunately that is something you can correct. As long as you just keep adding it in it becomes a habit. Like when you mentioned Paul you could say what he was doing when she left the house for example you could say ‘I told Paul, my brother, that I was leaving the house, his ash blonde hair was ruffled from the long night he had stayed in bed and his blue eyes, the only feature that resembled mine, glared at the screen as he focused on killing the men that had infiltrated into his camp.’ You see by adding that little bit of extra detail you have a more realistic character.

Plot: 6

I can see that you can go places with it but at the moment there is nothing really different about it. It remains to say that the plot seems a little bland at the minute and needs something to spice it up a little. It may just be because I read a lot so I can predict how things will turn out in a plot line but that’s why writers have to work so hard now-a-days because you have to compete with other writers that write in the same genre. Don’t fall for the usual things with this plot like the step-father starts abusing her or is evil or what not because it happens in so many stories and it makes it repetitive. If that isn’t what you had planned then ignore the previous comment and continue on.

Grammar: 8

Not bad grammar at all. Sometimes the sentence structure was a bit weird and hard to follow but that’s easy to fix. Just take care when writing and be sure to check your punctuation.

Page Turner: 6

I didn’t really feel obliged to turn the page because there wasn’t really anything that caught my attention. You’d mentioned how her mother was with a man and that is a cliff hanger in its own right but for me it needed the extra kick for example say that her mother has her back to her and the man glares in her direction with a sly smirk on his face… then you can describe him as a sinister character and it gives the reader something better to go on.

Total: 32 – Recommended

W.A.B