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Review Of: Jessica

Jessica By ellarobinson

Introduction: 10

You have it girl! You’ve nailed it down to a ‘t’. You created the mental image in my head with the way you described the setting and every single detail no matter how small, you described it. It’s what I look for with introductions and I can’t say much more because I firmly believe you captured it with your writing.

Characters: 10

The way you described them was as if they were right next to you and the reader can really get that from your writing. The tone in which you write gives the narrator and personality in their own character and it’s just the basics you did amazingly so that it created an in depth character. You explained their personality, their appearance, what they like to do and so I already know the people you are describing in detail. I already know what sort of characters they are.

Plot: 8

The plot is simple. But most of the time it doesn’t matter how simple the plot is; it’s how you execute it. The plot you have at the moment is one I can find quite a few place, what makes it different is the way you are writing it, so you need to make sure that you keep your own flair in your writing, don’t let that go, because the moment you do then it becomes like all the others. Also make sure you put your own twists in. Easier said than done I know, but to keep this story your own it has to be done to make sure that the reader can NEVER guess how you’re going to end the story…

Grammar: 10

Perfect, from what I could see you really took care with your grammar and it showed. There were no silly mistakes to point out and even if there were mistakes I seriously didn’t notice them. The way you structured your writing was good and the complexity of the sentences was also well used. The way you used a range of vocabulary and punctuation to emphasize certain points made your writing seem professional. There’s not much more to say.

Page Turner: 9

You had me turning the page every time so that I could find out where the story was going although her thoughts at the end were a little cliché, I really enjoyed reading your writing. It’s fresh and easy to follow; it’s full of detail and is perfect for imagining an everyday situation that people can get into. It’s really good and you should be happy with the result because honestly you’ve done yourself proud!

Total: 47 – Bookmark/Add to your library

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