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Review Of: Best Friends Forever

Best Friends Forever By Sef311

Introduction: 8

The introduction was a large paragraph that contained a lot of detail and thoughts and emotions and it was really well thought out. I can’t say there was anything wrong about it and I can’t say how to improve other than the fact that it seemed a little too long. After the part of ‘but there is always one friend that will stand out from the rest.’ That’s where you need to new paragraph because it’s going from talking about a collective to ‘Ashley’ so it means that you’ve already introduced what the chapter is going to be about.

Characters: 8

You introduced Ashley amazingly. All her characteristics and how she interacted with different people. Then how she walked to the room and what she was dressed in. You made the comparison between the narrator and Ashley and you also introduced the personality and self-consciousness of Amanda by the way she spoke about herself which is good. Sometimes it’s good to limit some amount of the information about the characters personality to be able to link it to a later scenario but as you still have some appearance left to describe you’ve left it to the imagination of the readers. Well done. Just don’t weaken the characters you’ve produced.

Plot: 5

I didn’t really thrive off of the plot because it seemed so simple to me due to the way it seems that the two ‘best friends’ are going to turn into enemies, or so it seems. That’s all there really is to say…

Grammar: 5

It’s good but there are some basic spelling mistakes. It basically just needs an edit. Also it could do with some varying sentence introductions or after someone has spoken.

Page Turner: 5

It sort of gave me the cliff hanger to turn the page at the end but there needs to be a bit more of a twist or question to keep the reader hooked. It was subtle but it seemed a little too hidden. In this case you needed to continue to chapter a little to enable yourself more possible ideas to end to story and keep it going.

Total: 31 - Recommended

W.A.B