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Review Of: Bite Me...

Bite Me By Kendya

Introduction: 8

It was good. It made me question the situation. It wasn’t very strong but it still had me hooked into the story and by the time it really got into it I couldn’t stop reading it. The fact that you started with speech is always a good thing, trust me because it gives you a character straight away and makes you wonder about why that are saying what they are saying. However, what you made Katie say wasn’t very exciting, so that’s something you can improve on. You could have it so that Destiny is running until her hearts content to try and get there on time, although you don’t reveal that she’s late and then you have Katie yelling ‘Oi, Destiny! What the hell took you so long?’ Then you have your speech and the fact that it was action and fast paced to begin with…

Characters: 9

I like the way you described them individually, it showed us Destiny’s character at the same time because it showed what she thought of those people. By doing it from her perspective you gained a better understanding of how the characters you had produced were viewed by other people, which is always a good way to add depth to your character. All I will say is that sometimes it’s better to vary the way you introduce characters so that it doesn’t seem like you’re writing the same thing. For example you can use different scenarios to describe the characters as flashbacks from Destiny or just because she sees them there and then.

Plot: 8

I like the idea of the plot. I haven’t read the blurb and won’t until I have finished this review because it’s just the way I do reviews… The plot seems like a regular vampire story. She’s found out what they are so now she is going to be in danger not only from those vampires but from others too, she’ll fall in love and something will probably happen to her where in the end she’ll have to face the possibility of being a vampire. I just hope if that is where you are going with the story, that you make it your own and not the same guideline vampire story that has been floating about since Miss Meyer decided that Vampires had to be sparkly and brought back the whole craze.

Grammar: 10

Grammar wasn’t too bad at all, there may have been some silly mistakes in there so just be sure to check over your work, but other than that, I really think you did well with your grammar.

Page Turner: 9

You definitely had me turning the page because I was intruiged to see what was going to happen next, despite the fact that to me it seemed quite cliché. I actually wanted to know what was going to happen to her. The chapter seemed to go quite fast and the ending just tied it up nicely. I think you’re going to have a good hit with this story so keep it up!

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