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Connecting Lines -RRR_29

Username: RRR_29
Title: Connecting Lines
Genre: Humor
Summary:
My ears were shut down and naglalaro lang ako sa curly locks of my hair until he said. .

"You're going to CONNECT THE LINES."

At natauhan ako.

- - - - - -

She's Alexandra Martinez.

She's pretty,

She's smart,

And extremely rich.

Almost perfect ang buhay niya until one day, lahat ay magbabago.

Will she take the risk and leave everything behind?

Or will she refuse ang tawag ng tadhana?

So, be with Alex as she unravels the secrets and mysteries between the connected lines.

Review: Hmmm... First thing I noticed is the "Genre" hindi ko maintindihan kung bakit mo nilagay sa humor category. Wala kasi talaga akong nakitang exactly funny. Parang ang serious serious pa nga. Yung batuhan nila ng lines na baka yun ung pinaghugutan mo ng humor is, not funny kasi asaran nila 'yung dating sa akin. Yung mood kasi nila hindi naman naka-set sa patawa or something masaya sila, so hindi ume-effect na nakakatawa. Pero it's not a bad thing kasi, kung ano 'yung feeling ng characters mo, nafifeel ko kaya hindi ako natatawa.

Then about naman sa pagbasa ko sa story mo, I can say na simula pa lang, your story brought me in. Intriguing yung title. Hindi predictable 'yung mga mangyayari. Intriguing din yung story mo, unique and my originality.

I like the way your words flowed.

I can see that you are grabbing your readers interest with something, because in your story nakita kong you wanted readers to indulge themselves in your story, you want them to love it, and simply enjoy it at successful naman. Pero medyo nag-aabang pa ko ng more actions and drama? Heheh!

I enjoy your story, and I plead for an update soon okay?

This is just based on my own opinion. Bawal magalit. Heheh.