"In Him we have redemption through His blood, the forgiveness of sins, according to the riches of His grace,"
Ephesians 1:7
Hi guys!
There's one minor issue (okay not minorr buhhh you get it).
Basically I feel that this book isn't going like how I wanted (for example chapter 14 part 1 ((which I think that I'm gonna edit)) amongst other chapters that I worked really hard on only for them to fall flat. Now I'm not saying that I will stop writing DT as you guus deserve a proper ending but it's getting really hard to you guys. Any kind of feedback will be helpful like: (Not saying to comment on all of this but things like it)
A. What can I do to improve?
B. Is the story going to slow/fast or just enough?
C. Is the character development on point or could it use some work.
D.) Who's your favorite character and why?
E.) Is my style of writing appealing?
F.) What do you think of the main characters like: Alana, Neymar, Andrew, Leo etc.)
G. Is the story line good?
H. Is the story boring/exciting/eh/whatever.
Whatever you find fit! I won't have hurt feelings it's fine. Feel free to be as honest as possible.
Please and thank you :).
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¡Que Dios te bendiga!
Deus te abençoe!
Que Dieu te benisse!
God bless you all!
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dominique
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Double Trouble Too // Neymar Jr //
FanfictionTime heals all wounds, right? Maybe for most people, but Alana Amero isn't in the category of most people. Over a year later after her bitter break up with Neymar, she believes her worries are over. But when she's asked to help oversee the tasks one...
