At your service by -lovelier
reviewed by Myself_Miss_Amazing
I would like to say the story was fabulous. Please forgive me if my review hurt the writer's or someone else's feeling.
Summary: The summary did not leave much mystery to the story. The readers who like teen romance would find it appealing, but those who are not used to such stories might not even take another look at it. The best kind of summary invites all the readers to at least give the story a chance no matter what genre it belongs to. Over all, it was simple and sweet, yet lacked an inviting aura.
Chapter one: Using multimedia as the heading font was a creative idea, as well as the quotes. The right amount spice adds flavor to food, same goes with writing, one should have the idea of how much descriptive words one should use. Sometimes more words are likable, but if one is trying to make the chapter humorous, they shouldn't give a dull, descriptive start. The effort was appreciable. The writing style wasn't unique but it did not feel out of the place either. The grammar was rightly used.
Overall, it was a nice start, apart from descriptions which can be worked on to make the content more likable.
Chapter two: This chapter truly showed the real potential of the writer, and was twice as better as the introductory chapter. But this chapter lacked dynamism, more events in shorter words that is more action in an one hour movie, is always enjoyable.
Chapter three: The start of the chapter seemed liked an overused idea. Also this chapter was slightly disappointing and felt forced unlike the previous one. Though the words and scenarios tried to be humorous and lighthearted, they seemed slightly dull. Witty comebacks and a newer idea to start the chapter will give the writer golden remarks. But overall it was a nice for light reading.
Chapter four: The dynamism was still lacking and the chapter felt unnecessarily dragged. But this chapter was better than previous one.
Chapter five: The chapter was good, but would have been better if combined with the previous chapter.
Overall, it was nice cliché teen fiction which can be appreciated by a lot of readers of the similar genre. The plus point turned out to be the growth of the writer by every chapter as well as the use multimedia.
Rate: 6.5/10
