I'm thatsmybias, reviewing Orange Crush by @AESinger . I'm sorry if my opinions can be rude or such ways, I hope you'd understand this from the bottom of my heart reviewing your work!
Cover : The letters could need a bit shadows or outlines, therefore it'll be more eye catching to readers.
Description: amazingly written !
Prologue : So from here, I'm gonna be very honest. I loved the prologue, it was more likely to be a chapter. I swear I read it till the end and it got me like " wait what this is the prologue ? Holy. " but i loved it ! Your first chapter, not prologue I suggest. In your prologue, I love how you described your main character ( how you bring a character to life, you let us feel what she feels ).
First chap : I'm in love with your character! Max in this case is my favourite. Your chapter was well written. I love how you ended the chapter with a sort of cliffhanger thing. Yea. You're really talented in bringing readers into the world of feelings. Anyways, you could have shorten the chapter, it's kinda long actually. But well done!
Second chap : Fantastically written ! Love Max, the ideal type of guy every girl would fangirl to.
Third chap : Very nicely written !
Goods :
So the good thing about your story is, I love how you bring the character into life, you bring your readers into the story. Each and every detail you explained, amazing ! I can hardly find a mistake in your work, well done ! And most of all, I was drifted by the story. You made it clear she's not some perfect girl and I'm IN LOVE with Max.
Bads :
Try shortening the paragraphs, readers who are easily bored may just skip the parts and you don't want that. I suggest that you cut the chapter into half, let the other half into a new chapter.
Overall, I loved it ! Well done !
Hopefully this helped.
