Summary: It's written well. But trust me, no one is going to read that much. Try concizing it, at the same time giving a jist of what the story is about.
Title: The title is very interesting. It leaves the reader wondering about the mysteries that are going to unfold in the story.
Cover: It isn't appealing at all. I don't think any reader will get fascinated by its cover. I know 'don't judge a book by its cover' holds true in case of your story but, you know, there are readers on Wattpad who judge a book only by it's cover.
Story:
POSITIVES: I like the simple narrative style in which the story has been written. I also like the way you go slow with introducing things. I even like the way you tend to emphasise upon every detail. I like the story line too.
NEGATIVES: You have a good sense of vocabulary. However, I think you require a little practice in forming complete sentences. I strongly feel that even though you know about a lot of appealing words, but at the same time you face trouble in forming sentences with them. Tell me if I'm wrong. If you need any help with it, we are always there at your service.
TIPS: Work on the book cover, summary and sentence formations.
BOOK NAME: Second Lanark
AUTHOR USERNAME: RElizabethM
REVIEWER: Call_me_chic
