[MN: Welcome back to this horrid fanfic commentary! This time we'll learn about something that can turn a vampire into a bat!]
Chapter 3 - MCR CONSERT, I find out a vampir secret [MN: Just what it says on the tin.]
OK PPL HU REVIEW 2 SAY SHIT ABOUT MI STORI CAN GO FUKK DEMSELFS. [MN: Well it's a piece of s***, author! GO FUDGE YOURSELF!!! 🖕] my stori is beleiveble [MN: OH NO IT ISN'T! You. Are. A. Very. Bad. Author! Curse you!!!] u just hav 2 keep readin n u can c y!1 but to ppl hu gav me good reveiws, THANX U GUYZ ROKK 333 LUV U [MN: HMPH! Whatever!!! We're starting the chapter already!!! Ngahhhhhhh!!!]
CHAPTER 3
"Hey betch wat r u doin home." midnite asked. [MN: I'm gonna belch right now...! 🤢]
"u hav 2 promise not 2 say nething..." [MN: Now look at this net that I just found!] i sed nervly [MN: Boy, this makes me nervous!]n midnite laffed [MN: Laffy Midnite!] n sed "hu wuld i say somthing 2, we r loners remeber?' [MN: Yes, that was mentioned 2 chapters ago.]
"o yea" i sed and told her evrythin dat hapened. she gosped [MN: It's best if Twila went to a gospel concert.] wen i told her abot edword kissing me. "SO WATE" [MN: This is wasteful.] she scremed "R U GUYZ IN LUV NOW OR WHUT?"
"ya were goin 2 homecuming 2getha." [MN: Oh. So they must be in love. Or at least dance partners.] i showd her my blakk dress wif lace n leather n my spiky black shoez. [MN: Kinda reminds me of those clothing descriptions from My Immortal, though.] "edword sed he liks dese." [MN: Edward thinks these clothes are hot! I bet she'll be the belle of the ball!] we laffed happy 2gether [MN: Isn't that a song from the 60s?] n danced arond da house. [MN: Party time!!! Wooo!] we were so happi 4 me. [MN: I'm happy for you, Twila.] i sang tenagerz by mcr. [MN: UGH, TEENAGE VAMPIRES THESE DAYS!] den. ... DA DOOR NOCKED!
"TWIL WERE R U. sum1 asked frum outside. [MN: DUN DUN DUUUUN] i went 2 da door n it was alison. [MN: OH NO!!! It's Allison that fudging prep!] i scremed. IF U FUKKING TRI 2 SUKK MI BLOOD AGEN ILL GET ED i told her. [MN: When an evil vampire tries to suck your blood, what you gonna do? Threaten, I mean, shoo them by telling them you're gonna get Edward Cullen!] she bast in2 tearz. [MN: High five!✋️] midnite quikly jumoed [MN: Make her a sumo wrestler!] up 2 defend me but i told her to go awey bcuz i culd handle alis. [MN: You can do this, Twila! I believe in you!]
"ok y did u cum here." i sed. [MN: Alice, you bastid!] alisenz blody tears dint scare me. [MN: If I were Draculaura, I'd freak out.] i new she had enuf blood 2 last cuz of wen she attaked alison. [MN: Ah, that's the right amount blood to survive.] "i felt sooo bad 4 tring to drink ur blood" she histericly cry. "i wnted 2 alopogize wif a present." [MN: I forgive you, Alice and that was a nice apology present. So be a good vampire and think about what you've done!]
"All i wnat in dis world is edword, n i hav him so noting u can giv me matterz." [MN: All I want for Christmas is Edward!] i shucffed at her. But den ... she held up 2 TIKKETS 2 A MCR CONSERT! [MN: PLOT TWIST!!! MCR ROX! *bobs head violently back and forth* 🤘]
"OMFGGGGG!111" i was static. i grabed dem from her n gave 1 2 midnite. "actully" alison wimpered "1 was suposed 2 be 4 me. so we cold go 2getha" [MN: Will it be cold at the concert? I bet it will!]
"But i wanted 2 go wif ed" i shoted. i imagned his beutiful face wif his blakk eyliner n blakk lipstik. n his smexi bodi. [MN: Edward's a hotbod, a beefcake, a hunk, a heartthrob, OH MY! *collapses*] OK alison sed. "we can jus tak mi hole family. esmet realli luvs mcr 2" [MN; OK, that should work.]
so we went to da consert n ed n i had innercoarse on da way. evry1 tought we wer so cute. [MN: Well, having an intercourse isn't cute. Hello, this is public place and if I were you, Twila and Edward, I'd never do that, ever. 'Cause there's a concert going on.]
"THIS NITE WALK DA DEAD" scremed gerad way. [MN: Is that a song about zombies?] den... EVENIEZENCE KAME ON! dey sand a duet wif mcr. den dey sang sum more stuff. [MN: Wait a minute, wait a minute! Did Evanescence show up at an MCR concert? Haven't even attended an MCR concert. Oh wait, they just broke up! 😵]
emet had an ejaxclamation in da audience n sudenly HE TURNED IN2 A BAT. [MN: Flap flap flap 🦇] "OH SHITTTTT NOOOO" EDWard sighed. "dis is bad too twola, dis is realli bad." all dis bad stuf kept hapening wile i was wif dem. vampirs turn int2 batz wen dey r realli exited n evry1 wuld no his secret but no1 cared cuz dey wer all gothz. [MN: That's how Emet turned into a bat! But if they weren't goths they'd freak out! When I mean they, I mean everyone in the crowd!] gerad lookd at him from da stage n he jumpd down thru da crowd n came over 2 us.
"He bat." he sed in his fukking killer voce. i CREAMED so loud bcuz i luvvv gerad wif all my lyfe. [MN: At least Twila and Gerard were the only ones to react to this secret... positively!] his makueup waz runing bcuz he waz cring cuz dey sang helen (a/n dat song is abot his grandpa hu dyed RIP GERARDS GRANPA) [MN: Or a girl who died in a car accident. 😀] but he glarced at emset n tuched his wings n he turned bak. [MN: Ah, the magic of Gerard Way works on vampires who've just turned to bats.]
gerad went home wif da cullenz bcuz he nd emet becam bfs. [MN: Awwww! Make them kiss! 👨❤️💋👨] cuz dey fell in luv. i was sooo jealous but ed got angy n i told him i luv him so it waz ok. WE ALL WENT HOM N I GOT GERARDS AUTOGRAF. [MN: Meanwhile, jealousy intensified in Twila, but hey! That's a satisfying ending to the chapter!]
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