WATTPAD'S HIDDEN SECRETS

Book Name: Pretend

Title: Pretend

Author: Sharlay

Rating: 8.8/10

Status: Work in Progress

Authors Description: When April's boyfriend (Kyle) breaks up with her she is heart broken. She can't seem to get over him, but when her best friend's brother poses as her boyfriend at a party to make Kyle jealous and it works, she hatches the perfect plan or so she thinks...Sometimes pretending isn't the best game to play especially when pretending can become real and especially when you're pretending with your best friend's brother.

My review of the story: 

So far the story seems to be about a girl called April who has been dumped for the first time and is suffering through the pain and how bad it really does feel. When Aiden (her best friends brother) pretends to be her boyfriend for a party to avoid humiliation, things get awkward and it leads onto other things.

My Thoughts:

I have to say when I added your story to the list of books i had to read, your cover picture was stuck in my mind. So i was litterally counting down the books till I got to yours. That's good and your picture isn't too fake but it is enticing for readers because after all everyone judges a book by its cover. I have to say I like the story but in the beginning the note from the author, try putting it in bold so people can differientiate between the story and your words. Also it did annoy me that the prologue and chapter 1 were in the same entry, you should seperate them. I liked the prologue but the use of the word 'patronize' more than once lost its spark it first put into me. But the descriptions of how empty it felt without love was very vivid and clear, and it does connect with the audience well. I have to say that your work does keep up the interest of the audience and is entertaining. But, sometimes the dialogues and descriptions didnt flow well with the story (hardly ever) but in some areas it did. There were also some sentences that lacked words to complete the overall story. Your really good at descriptions but in some areas i think it lacked and you could've done way better. I didnt like that all three chapters were still about the party, it would've been nice to have one large chapter about the party and move on to the aftermath of the situation. But overall I like it and think you should upload more. 

Pointers to Audience: 

- A story you have to check out and support.