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DIVISION: SERENDIPITY
CATEGORY: BTS SHIPS
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[ LIST OF JUDGES]
- sugadose
[TABULATION OF SCORES]
[ LIST OF ENTRIES ]
Entry # 1 The Secret Of Andras by Reign_lulubel07
RATING: 51% (Eliminated)
REVIEWS:
♥ I understand that English is not the first language of most people, so that explains why your grammar was off-putting. The mixed up tenses and the repetition of phrases was a sore. Punctuation is also amiss, for instance, I know these (...) should always be three, not two. And we never use an exclamation mark more than once in a single statement (!!!) Just NO (unless perhaps it's a text fic where rules of conversation differ). There's also a big difference between "his" and "he's", "your" and "you're" so perhaps you should get a grip of the two. The word "suddenly" CANNOT be a sentence on its own(in your case a paragraph on its own!) but should be followed by a comma then the action. Basically, grammatically, everything was a mess. However, the story is quite captivating despite the rushed pace.
♥ The story plot was interesting. The cover was okay, just not a big fan of the fonts used though. The grammar used was poor, with a few punctuation errors. Also, the paragrahing was way too long, which made it a little confusing to follow.
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