Please comment I really need to know what I need to work on for my writing and also maybe things that I'm doing well at. I don't want to keep bothering you guys,but I just feel like a lot of you don't like my book. I really want to make it better.
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"Ms.Cloud where are we going." says Alison
"Just call me Anita and you are going to stay at the police station for a while." says Anita.
"that seems like that would be fun where are we going to sleep." says Alison
"Well you are going to stay in a conference room wait....you want me to stay with you?" Anita say questioning her.
"Well I'm scared to be alone without someone there after what happened to me yesterday I don't think I will ever be safe by myself until my mom comes back." she says seriously.
"Okay I will sleep with you anyway the conference rooms don't have any windows,so whoever or group did this to you won't be able to tell where you are. It might be a while until you would be able see your house again because it isn't safe for you to be there.The door will always be locked and when you wake up wake me up or if I wake up first I'll wake you up,but what I'm getting at is don't leave that room without me telling you it is safe okay?" Anita says trying to be like a mother to her.
"Okay I promise I won't leave that room without you right by me!" says Alison meaning it.
They arrived at the station. When they were in the conference room Alison was making a two spots one for her and one for Anita. Alison ended up sleeping in the police station with Ms.Cloud in the conference room where they put up the pictures, but Ms.Cloud took the board turned it around and slid it as close to the wall as possible. She doesn't want Alison looking at the things because she might think that we won't find her and she would always be soooo sad. It was about two hours later (it is 8:00 p.m.) they were playing Candy Land under a fort that they made at about 6:00. It was made from the table chairs and some pillows,blankets and one sleeping bag which they had at the station for some odd reason. Alison's favorite game to play is candy land and she also loves building forts. Candy land was the only game that she would play with her mother before you know what happened. Then all of the sudden they heard a knocking,so Anita went over to the light switch and turned it off. They sat in the corner of the conference room behind the board which Alison couldn't see which of course was a good thing for Alison. They were going to sit under their fort,but if it was a bad guy that is the first spot they would look. They were going to hide behind the white board unless the bad guy was walking over there then they were going to sneak under their fort. It lasted for about an hour before the knocking finally stopped,so Alison grabbed her computer and they continued playing with the lights off. For there light source they just used Alison's computer for light until Alison fell asleep between 1:30 and 12:00.
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Hey everyone I hope that you like my book so far. Three chapters down and plenty more to go. Keep reading and discovering.
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The rest of my life
Teen FictionA 14yr. old named Alison wakes up to find out that her mom Dana was know where to found and her life is going to be turned upside down. Read my 2nd book The New Rest of My Life.
