Ya' know what? This is a really good FF and super popular... Time to search for flaws! :D
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1. "So what are you looking at?" He asked while looking at my computer screen.'
Wow author! Great job making Jordan a fucking stalker!
2. "Hey! I live in those apartments! We will be neighors!"
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Jordan, there's other apartments in the building than the one right next to yours. You don't know she'll be your neighbor...
3. "He was hanging his hand out the window and he dropped his phone."
Okay, who the fuck would hold their phone out a car window? An idiot, that's who.
4. 'I realized a long deep gash in Jordan's calf.
"Ouch, that looks painful."
No shit sherlock
5. "Yeah, why not"
THERE'S NO FUCKING QUESTION MARK AT THE END OF THAT SENTENCE!!! UGH!
6. "I will have a water"
"Me too"
Okay guys, this is breakfast! Y U NO GET OJ? I MEAN, OBVIOUSLY THEY LIKE IT 'CAUSE OF WHAT HAPPENS LATER ON!!!
7. "His body went limp in my arms."
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Nope *puts gun in mouth* I cannot live with the love of my life dead. Nope.
8. "I'm sorry, but I have no idea who you are."
Holy fuck, that's cliche.
9. "That's all we can do for now."
I'm sorry? Your son got kidnapped and you haven't flung the police officer across the room already?
10. "One million dollars. I want it by tomorrow."
Damn, Ryan! You have too high expectations!
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Everything Wrong With Fanfictions
FanficThis book is intended for SATIRE AND COMEDY! So, if you take the title at face value and go to the comments to bich about it, I will laugh mercilessly at your stupidity. I'm just trying to be funny. K? Good. *Eats Waffle*
