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judges:
winners:
in first place is when the world calls by lionobsession with a score of 53/60!
review:
I find the story cover is appropriate for the story and works well with the title. The summary is interesting sparking an urge, a desire to read the story. The good grammar and neat spellings make reading a delightful experience.
The plot is intriguing and starts with the news announcement over the loudspeakers in London, post the apocalypse. The main character- Lizzy comes across as a responsible young lady who loves her dog, Merlin. Like the way you incorporate rain as a factor leading to Lizzy's panic attacks. You have described the scenes so vividly, I can picturise them in my mind. We are introduced to Harriet, Lizzy's manager and from what we read, she's a lovely and kind lady who cares about Lizzy's health and well-being. Lizzy is a hard worker and loves her job serving people from the kitchen counter.
The pacing is tight and the scenes move along quickly. Even though Lizzy is at fault, I like the way Harriet stands up for her. Speaks a lot about her character.
I loved reading it. My best wishes to the writer for writing a lovely story! ~ nablai
in second place is earth: lost civilization, 2050 by blossomsblues with a score of 48/60!
review:
The story cover is enticing and does a good job of gelling with the title. The summary is engaging and retains our interest. It makes us eager to start reading the story. The error-free spellings and neat grammar make it a riveting read.
The story starts with the MC Alex Connor and her brother Ben trying to get into C.O.R.P.S. Alex doesn't make it, but he is ecstatic for her brother who makes the cut. Their parents were in the C.O.R.P.S and the disappointment of not making it through, gets to Alex. He had fought with a cop around three months back and it seems he was being punished for his actions. I really admire the Governor and his friends Rimera(she's the Governor's daughter)stand for Alex. Just shows his trust in his abilities. Even if he is innocent, Alex gets caught for trespassing on the C.O.R.P.S property and asked to leave. From there starts a new journey(you have to read the story to know more!).
The pacing is fast and scenes keep us on our toes. I do like the way Alex reminisces about his self-defense classes. Especially one girl he trained. A warrior in the making.
I loved it. Thanks a lot for sharing a wonderful story :) ~ nablai
in third place is out of the ordinary by sboufath with a score of 47/60!
review:
Title: The title of this story isn't bad, however, I feel like it is t the most intriguing choice. I feel like it is somewhat of a generic-sounding title, and something more specific to the story itself could make a more interesting choice.
Cover: The cover for this story is very eye-catching and mysterious! I really like the text placement and the style of the text. It gives the cover a professional look. I also really like the choice of the image of the person with the glowing blue around them. The only concern I have with the cover is that it is quite dark. I feel like more contrast with lighter/brighter colors might make it more dramatic.
Summary: The summary of this story isn't bad. It introduces a compelling plot and makes me want to read the story and find out what will happen. I feel like there is room for improvement as far as writing style in the summary. Some of the sentence structures read oddly. Additionally, I'm not a fan of the opening about how ordinary Kaley is. I'd suggest just getting right to the interesting part and starting off the blurb with "Kaley has an obsession with..." If possible, I think breaking this blurb up into two small paragraphs rather than one large one could make it more enticing to read.
Character Development: I like Kaley's narrative voice. I think she is a fun character and her personality shines through the way she tells her story. I think it's a cool character trait that she so adamantly believes in the existence of aliens. The fact that she is fascinated with the unknown phenomena makes her an interesting character to me. I also like that she feels upset watching others in her town make fun of Mr. Handerman. It shows that she is compassionate and caring and maybe a bit sensitive.
I felt like the character Kyle was a bit suspicious. I wonder if maybe he is an alien. Kaley's friends Pam and Amy also seem like great characters. However, I felt like the narrative exposition at their introduction explaining who their characters are and their personalities wasn't the most effective from of characterization. I thought it could have been more effective if their personalities were shown through dialog and character actions instead.
The interactions between Kaley and her mom were really well done. The mother's reactions to Kaley running off into the woods and telling her mom about seeing an alien were very realistic and believable. The interaction between Kaley and her friends in chapter 3 was a great way of showing the relationship between the three of them.
To me, Kaley seems fairly young. I would have placed her closer to 12 or 13 than 15 years old.
Plot Development: I thought the plot development in this story was really well done. I liked how the suspense around the main plot was built right from the beginning with Mr. Handerman claiming to have seen an alien. Then, when Kaley goes out looking for the alien at night, I was pulled into the story and worried about what she would discover.
The plot itself is thrilling and intriguing! There are a few aspects of it that I'm not quite sure of, however. For example, I found it hard to believe that Mr. Handerman would let Kaley go after the dangerous alien alone. Additionally, the introduction of Kyle seemed important in the beginning, but then almost forgotten later on. I feel like he will become important again, so it might work to have Kaley think about him and wonder more about him throughout the story.
I thought the pace of the story was a bit quick. In my opinion, the story might be able to build more suspense if there was more of a lead in before Kaley actually finds the alien. I thought the mystery of what is going on could have been built up more. Although, I really liked how the alien disappeared as soon as Kaley looked away after finding it. That was a great way of pulling the reader in and leaving them with questions that need answers!
I liked the plot point of Kaley lying to the man from the government. It makes sense that she would want to protect the alien she found. However, I felt like this scene was a bit rushed. I might have liked more description and internal character thought at this point to develop the scene more.
Grammar: The grammar in this story is decent. There aren't many recurring issues with grammar, but there are a number of typos and mistakes with punctuation. Another proofread of the story could easily catch these errors.
Personal Enjoyment: I really enjoyed reading this story! Kaley is a fun character and her narration is engaging and enjoyable to read. I really like how quirky she is and the fact that she doesn't let the fact that everyone doesn't believe her get her down. The plot of this story is my favorite part. It's a fun, thrilling, story with a quick pace that keeps me turning the pages. ~AmyMarieZ
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