Erotic Book Club (E.B.C) 2021

Faded Dreams (Feedback)

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Second book of the session: January 16th - 29th, 2021

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Reviewer: Chantielu

Comments: I like the story. In fact, I think Quin is my favorite character(even though he is a side character) I love the realism of the characters and how they react to each other. Even if a reader is not a fantasy lover the story will draw them in. Thumps up for that!

I did notice the use of 'that' in a sentence where it was not needed. In chapter one, it stated: It had gotten so bad, that on nights she didn't dream of him...

However, in this sentence, the use of 'that' doesn't have a specific meaning, and therefore becomes a dead weight. Thus, it could be cut. Eg. It had gotten so bad, on nights she didn't dream of him, she'd...

Without 'that' the sentence still has the same meaning.

There is another time I noticed it. But, because there isn't a lot, I summed it up as a slip.

Anyway, I wasn't sure what you were referring to when you said description was your weakness because I was able to visualize everything. I don't know if it's just me, but I thought it was done just right. It wasn't too much to slow the pacing of the story and not too little to not get the proper mental movie going. It was just right.

Otherwise, I loved the chapters I've read. Keep up the great work! 

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Reviewer: SSMarie358

Comments: 1) What did you think the book was about?

The book is about Gaia having odd dreams about a vampire like creature blowing her mind away with fantastic sex, and at the same time, he is drinking her blood and feasting off her. Basically, Gaia is in love with this vampire creature in her dreams and soon discovers that the dreams are probably not dreams and it's actually happening in real life.

2) Did you feel the book fulfilled your expectations?

Yes, It fulfilled my expectations. I felt the first chapter was a bit slow, and parts of it confused me. Still, once I read further, it all started coming together. The plot formed fairly nicely, and I became interested within chapter 3.

3) What about the plot? Does it pull you in? Or did you feel you had to force yourself to read the book? Any plot holes you may have noticed? Where?

I found the plot to be a fairly unique idea. I haven't seen a vampire story where the girl is dreaming about the vampire, and they are having fairly hot relations in the dream. It is different than I am used to. Wattpad is mostly filled with vampire slaves, and the vampire falls in love with the human slave. That's what I've mostly seen, and this was different.

I do feel that I had to push myself through chapter 1. I hope no one else feels that way, and maybe I just had a brain fart while trying to read it. I feel like I was mostly confused about who Gaia was, and it jumped right into her having a dream. I think initially introducing her through her dreams might not have been the best start. I want to be able to connect to the character and know who she is.

There wasn't much of a hook in the first chapter. It starts off, "It had been a long day at work." Cool, I have long days all the time, but I feel like I need some type of emotion or connection. I need something to hook me within those first couple of sentences. It could be Gaia over filling her coffee cup at work because she is daydreaming about McDreamy Vampire that really rocked her pussy the other night. She isn't able to shake off the dreams she is having and wondering all day long if she will dream about him again. Then I can learn about her not having much of a sex life since her last high school boyfriend or her one night stand from the bar. I really want to get to know Gaia in the first chapter and have that catalysis set in motion. Once I got through the slower parts, it actually became very intriguing and good.