The Three of Us

A fantasy fiction story I wrote about three guys who get sucked into the world of their favorite video game and have to try and figure out how to escape. Ive never finished writing this but I wanted to share it to see if I should continue. If anyone would actually like to read it. It has its issues like dialogue can be confusing to understand so if you have any advice I want to hear it. It was my first story Ive written of this scale and its not perfect but its interesting. Hope you enjoy and do tell me if you like it or not, I'm experimenting right now so please be honest. Thank you and have a wonderful day/night!