I love the background, but you need to work more on the fonts, no matter how I stress my eyes I can't still see the author's name, not only is the text small, a different colour choice is needed. I would also suggest a different font style, maybe more bolder than the one you used.
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BLURB 📘
I don't really know how short stories blurbs are since yours is actually the first or second I have read here on Wattpad, but it looks ok to me, because I don't see anything else you can write there, you simple said everything the book was about, but you could try and space the work properly.
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WALKING WITH CRAIG 📘
A really beautiful and emotional story. I love the message it sent out to everyone, mostly to couples out there. It's really sad that Craig had committed suicide right before his wife came back to him and how she only realized his problems later, if only they could turn out the hands of time.
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LIFE OF A TEEN 📘
Ok, this one is just as emotional, and I feel like I connected more with this than the first, because this was more relatable than the first. What happened to Temi has happened to lot of girls and it's a really a life lesson to learn from.
Rape is a big issue in this world of ours and we see it happening everywhere, both to men and women. It's sad that Temi's parents are so ignorant, I understand her anger towards them at the last chapter, they should work harder on their responsibility, but what happened to Temi wasn't their fault but the person who raped her, if only she had listened to Tope and hadn't gone to that party, it's sad.
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PUNCTUATION 📘
This is where you had problems in your book. Sometimes you forgot to put a closing punctuation before the closing quotation. Other times you didn't give space after a comma.
Example
"I need the fruits,milk and one of Aunty Chioma's popcorn" Sarah said. ❎
"I need the fruits, milk and one of Aunty Chioma's popcorn," Sarah said. ☑️
Notice the punctuation marks?
Another is something I think I talk about in almost every review I give in people's book. It's a common mistake made.
When you're writing a dialogue that follows with 'he said, she replied, I muttered' we use a comma to end the sentence.
"Don't even ask me," He replied.
When it ends with an action, that has nothing to do with how the sentence was said we use a period.
You could check out past review to get a better understanding on that.
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OVERALL IMPRESSION 📘
Grammar was good, there were few grammatical errors here and there, which I trust you to edit later. Your description was acceptable, you gave a nice enough view of the happenings in the book, you could work on it more for a better of your reader's enjoyment.
While I enjoyed both stories, there is a little issue I have with the first story 'Walking with Craig'.
When Craig's wife [I can't remember her name] was having the vision which took her to the past, she saw that her husband had gotten those images from someone and well, if it wasn't that important, it would be ok if you hadn't revealed who sent them.
But then, your character had asked the question herself, this isn't just something to slide, it has become a major mystery of the plot, I was kinda dissapointed when we didn't see this, because that message was one of the thing that led to their separation and Craig committing suicide, if you ask me, I suspect his wife's best friend.
Both stories were really good, it's really a life lesson. Good job, keep up the good writing.
