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REVIEW ON THE FORSAKEN GIRL BY KOLADEMOTIROLA

Review on The Forsaken Girl by KoladeMotirola

A story of a young woman, Jessica Adebowale. Molested by her own brother at a very young age. This story follows the life of Jessica as she learns to love and accept herself.

COVER 📘

Your cover is beautiful, from the background to the font. It was nicely done. The color wasn't too bright that it was begging for attention, it was nice.

TITLE 📘

Your title is nice. It gives your readers an idea on what your story is about before they can even get to the blurb. It's straight to the point and isn't complex. The Forsaken Girl already gives your readers the picture of a girl with a broken past or still living a broken life, it will draw their attention, so nice title choice.

BLURB 📘

Your blurb is nicely detailed. The first paragraph there is enough to keep your readers glued to the screen, because after...

"Stop, this is not right." She said.

Who wouldn't want to know *what wasn't right*. So this was done well. Although it needs to be edited, there were repeating of words and punctuational errors in some area.

PUNCTUATION/GRAMMER 📘

Now, this part is the main problem your book is having. Right from the blurb I saw punctuational errors right from your blurb.

Now your book may be very nice, but you don't want to discourage people from reading it because of the errors found in the blurb. So that is where you should start from, before coming to the book.

*The first punctuational error that was made was not giving space after a comma. I noticed this same thing in your blurb.

As he spoke each word,he moved closer to her.

After a comma, before writing the next word, a space should always be given.

As he spoke each word, he moved closer to her.

*Second one, this is not really a punctuational error, but something I wanted to point out.

~Not giving space after a closing quotation mark. If after a dialogue, you want to add a tag, there should be space after the closing quotation mark.