Teen Fiction Reviews by Laly13 Vol. 2

review #102: My Secret Valentine

author: xxCancerbaby98xx

read it if: you like secret admirers

plot:

She isn't the prettiest, she isn't the sexiest, she isn't the most popular.

She never expected anything great or exciting to happen to her. She isn't exactly the girl every guy wants.

She's just Faye Evans.

And she expected to be alone this Valentine's day. But someone see's something great in her, and he tells her so to -with a note he leaves in her locker.

The question is, can Faye attatch a name to her secret admirer? Can she find her Valentine?

review:

Story: this story is a 50\50. I love the whole "secret admirer" thing in stories, this is one of the few stories where all main characters are black, and well since the start of the anonymous notes you're always wondering the author of those. But the downside is that the "admirer" is revealed, and since that the story starts to get boring since it's all about trying to backstab one another. And I saw full lyrics in a chapter and no, just no!

Grammar: need a good dose of editing

Characters: They're all cool people, but they doesn't appear in my mind at random times or when I want to have blissful memories of books.

note to author:

If you're reading this, thanks for making this. Don't want to sound offensive, but just get over with the story. Not saying you should rush it right now, but just make happen all the important parts because it's getting a little repetitive and I'm getting a little bored. Keep writing and take care ;)

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