Teen Fiction Reviews by Laly13 Vol. 2

review #104: Overcoming Fear With Ball And Love

author: alexuswhite028

read it if: you don't care about grammar errors

plot:

Overcoming Pain with Ball and Love is about a girl named Emily who grows up in the projects and overcome even her biggest fears with love and basketball

review:

Story: Can’t say much since this only has one chapter, but I must say it’s cool the friendship the girls shown in the chapter has. The bad stuff of this story?  Besides that the chapter doesn’t get us to anywhere far, I’ll  get to the big part on the next section

Grammar: I’m speechless because of the many errors. There’s no separations between narrating and dialogue(everything is a massive paragraph) and the capitalizations are missing. I demand editing ASAP

Characters: I don’t have anything to say since the thing regarding the friendship I saw I just said it above, so why repeat the same thing?

note to author:

if you’re reading this, thanks for making this. I hope you update and improve the grammar skills, because I don’t want a one chapter, badly written book in my reading list. If I hurt you in any way then sorry. Keep writing and take care ;)

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