Teen Fiction Reviews by Laly13 Vol. 2

Review #128: The Guy Next Door

author: Percabeth5599

read it if: you like love triangles

plot:

"Every good girl wants a bad boy who is good only for her."

"Every bad boy wants a good girl who is bad only for him."

"Whenever you are looking for love don't look too far he might be right next door."

Clara Wilson is your typical clichéd teen fiction protagonist with exactly two friends, no social life and a 4.0 GPA. She has been in love in love with Alec Evans, the unattainabley popular football quarterback and her next door neighbour forever.

She thinks she's in for a quiet senior year until Jake Henderson arrives. Bad boy extraordinaire, he's arrogant, rude, undeniably gorgeous and shares a past with Clara that she wants to do nothing more than to forget.

Caught between two boys, her life is turned upside down in the most ridiculous of ways. But maybe in the midst of all the confusion and chaos she finds not only love but also herself.

review:

Time for a pros and cons my children

The pro of this story is that this story has the strongest love triangle I've ever seen. You all know that the love triangle has 3 sides: the center of attention, the soulmate and the one that later has no chance of anything. In this book more than 50 chapters has passed and both guys has strong chances of winning(I would say 49\51 chance) and I still don't know who to really root for and what to expect

In the cons I'll start with the development of the love triangle. Before any of you say I'm contradictory, I'll speak clear: I like how the triangle isn't the cliche one where in chapter 15 everything is clear, but I don't like how long has it got and how indecisive the girl is(right now she's leaning more towards one guy, but she still kind of have equal feelings for both guys). At this moment all I want for her is to forget about the boys, enjoy life by herself and later take a 100% definite decision or find a completely new guy

The other con is the chapter length. Everytime I see a update I literally sigh a little and when I finish I feel like I used the Just Dance game for 24 hours straight

in conclusion, I get why the story has a lot of reads, but if I were you I would meditate first before going ahead

note to author:

if you're reading this, thanks for making this. If I was harsh in any part of this review, then I apologize, but like I always say I like to speak everything I feel. And a personal advice: be more positive with your writing. I've seen in almost all chapters that through yourself or your characters you bash your grammar and the plot, and that makes me think "then why is she writing here?" If you don't like the grammar, edit it or dind someone to do it, and if you want a better development then just sit, brainstorm and don't stop till you say "this is the best damn thing ever". Keep writing and tale care ;)

*And if any writer sas the advice in the "note to author" you can follow it too. Don't write to seek fame, to get someone's aprobation or because of obligation; do it because it's your passion or because you find it's a great way of expression

Now I bid goodbye, hope you enjoyed this. Comment, share, vote, follow, read my teen fiction reviews book vol. 1, if you're a directioner read my fanfic reviews books vol. 1, 2 and 3, and if you want to check a story of mine read "The Survival" ;)