The Runaway States (State/country humans) [Being Rewritten]

Rewrite

So this is a hard chapter for me to write but in the end I thought bout it and I think this is the best course of action. There's a lot to go over here so I'll start with explaining what I'm doing, then explain why I'm doing it.

My current plan is to leave this version of the story up, but start rewriting the main chapters going back to the beginning of the story. I won't be rewriting the .5s since I think they turned out how I wanted them too.

My release plan is to work on rewriting the story, and releasing it when I get to where I we are now in this version. I can't say exactly when that will be, but I'll be sure to let y'all know when I'm close.

Since I don't want to stop posting altogether for a while, I'll be releasing new stories about good old Georgia and the rest of the southeast, so be on the look out for those.

The reason I'm doing this is that I'm proud of this story. I've been working on it for a while, and I think I dug myself into a corner here. To explain what I mean, there's a term in writing which states that, if a story goes out of it's way to tell the audience that there is a gun on the wall, then that gun must be fired at some point. The trouble is, I have a lot of guns. For example, I mention North Korea in an early chapter because I originally planed on him being the main antagonist of the story, but later decided to swap him out. If you look back at the story, you'll see a lot of these cases. I figured out where I want this story to go now, but its a bit late, so I can try again. It's funny because when I originally started this story, I wrote a message to two writers who made these sort of stories and asked them for advice on what to do if I was new to writing and one of them said something great. I'll leave them aynoumous, but they said, 'always know where you want your story to go.' It's good advice, and I recommend it.

The other reason is that I am terrible with dialogue. It sounds robotic when characters talk. I'm hoping I can do a better job remaking those conversations.

If you guys want more state humans stuff that isn't from me like or chatrooms, Amino has a state humans amino that is probably the most wholesome Amino I've been on ngl. I'm also on there sometimes, though is don't post much, i sometimes go into chatrooms.

The last thing I want to say is thank you. Thank you for standing by me. Thank you for standing by a story with no consistent upload schedule. Thank you for giving a story I thought no one would read nine hundred and thirty views. Thank you for adding it to your reading lists for those who did. Thank you to NachoNuke, m83168316, Georgiaisbest, Fawnling9, twafflesthegreat, Lemonpoprose for their comments even if I rarely would reply. And lastly, thank you, the reader.