Aliens mate: Zyka (unedited)

Kayla

What I was assuming was a ship, shook like someone was attacking it, which caused the women to scream. Our cages were thrown all over the place. I curled into a ball trying to limit the damage that I would get from being tossed around. There was a big explosion to the right of me, blowing our cages into the wall and knocking the air out of me. While I was gasping for air, the loathsome creatures from earlier rushed into the room with guns that didn't look like human weapons.

The guns definitely shot out lasers, but these guns had an added feature of fire. I didn't want to be on the opposite end of one of those; there was no chance I would survive. I would barely survive a human gun let alone a gun with laser and fire.

"What the fuck is going on?" I shouted at the woman in my cage. Turning towards her I saw that she had a big ass piece of metal sticking out the side of her head. I started to freak out because I thought she was going to

"Don't move, you might cause more damage," I said, shaking my head and holding out my hands to stop her from moving. She started to touch her head, looked at me and hissed again. I looked at her still trying to catch my breath and figure out what the hell she just said to me.

She reached up and pulled the metal out of her head like it was a piece of paper stuck in her hair. I was confused about how she wasn't bleeding to death, but I didn't have the time to think about it. I let out a yelp as I fell down from the ugly creature being slammed into our cage by a man with dusty red skin and dark inky hair. When he slammed the creature into our cage, I hit my legs on the bars again.

I yelled. I picked myself up off the floor with the help of snake girl. I looked up at the man holding the creature by its neck. Curiosity got the better of me. I went closer to get a better look at our situation causing to snap at me.

"Okay, I will get out of your business, you ain't have to do all that," I said, backing away from the men and going over to the lizard woman who grabbed my arm and started hissing at me again.

"You really need to know I can't understand a word you're saying," I said, shaking my head. I snatched my arm out of her grip. I rubbed the spot that she was holding as it became sore. She is too damn strong. She almost squeezed my arm to death.

"Damn ma'am, you squeezed the fuck out of my arm. You are strong as hell. Don't be up here just grabbing me any kind of way," I said sitting down on the floor because a bitch was tired from being shaken like a rag doll. The woman let out a huff sitting beside me.

"I know you aren't huffing at me like I did something to you," I said looking at Miss Lizard. She looked at me and rolled her eyes. She hissed at me again, making me put my hand on my chest and let out a gasp.

"Miss Lizard, I thought we were besties, and now you're getting an attitude with me. What did I do?" I asked, crossing my arms. She just looked at me with a bored expression and turned back to the men in front of us. Since she ignored me, I let it go and also turned my attention to the

The red alien choked the hell out of the green alien as he struggled to get free. He deserved it for raping Miss Feathers. They were talking to each other, but it was more like the red alien was talking as the green struggled to get air. was slowly dying, the red man turned and started speaking loudly. I don't know if he was talking to his men who were storming the ship or to the men that they captured.

I moved closer to get a better look at the red alien and I must say that he was very good-looking despite his differences. I looked around at the different species of people and noticed that none of them were human or had the same skin color as me. They were more shades of the rainbow than human colors of different shades of browns and whites. I found it interesting. What did they look like when they were born? Were they like humans who got their color in a day or two, or were they born with their color?

I felt a rough hand caress my face, causing me to snap my head back. First of all, I didn't know where the hell that hand had been. Second of all, why the hell were they touching me? Hearing Miss Snake let out a gasp behind me, I looked back at her with an eyebrow raised in question. What was wrong with her? I searched her face to see if I had to act accordingly but I couldn't tell. I turned back to see who had touched me. It was the red man. I raised my eyebrow at him in question as to why he was touching me like he knew who I was. He reached through the bars again to touch me, but I backed up. I didn't want him to touch me with the same hand he was handling the rancid man with.

"Why are you trying to touch me?" I asked the man. I didn't know him from Billy, Bob, or Joe. So, I didn't know why he kept trying to touch me. He let out a growl of what seemed like frustration. I backed up into the bars in fear. The last time the green shits were making weird noises, they raped Miss Feathers.

Why is she talking at us instead of explaining this? Example: The guns were something I'd only seen in alien movies. It had a large handle, fit for (whatever creature) and shot out lasers.

Why? How?

Her aggressive attitude seems... unauthentic. It's almost like because she's black she's got to prove she's black in the story. This doesn't, as a reader, "feel" real.

The red what?

How can they be both?

Your FMC is an educated woman, yet she speaks like a teenager. "Mister Green" "Miss Feathers" etc. Let's find a more creative way to make these distinctions.

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I hope you guys like it so far.

I hate when people touch me without permission, it irks my last nerve.

Y'all okay with people touching you w/o permission?