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❄ FAUX HEARTS | VICTORIA ❄

Book Title: Faux Hearts

Author: gangstainheels247

Reviewed by: CroodsGirl

The review was edited by Juleyette

Title: 4/5

The title is simple, but I don't yet know its significance to the plot. Coming from someone who struggles with English, I had to look up what faux meant. Now that I know what it is, I guess it's safe to say that I don't see where it comes into the plot. Then again, I only read the first five chapters. Perhaps if you showed us the fake love a little earlier, it would fix the issue.

Cover: 2/5

Something can enhance the cover a bit. The objects and text on it were tiny. I didn't see the two people in the middle until I looked closer. To me, it doesn't look like a full-fledged book cover, a majority of the area is empty. To me, it looks more like a picture you would see on a poster. I think you can improve this if you just make the objects and text a little bigger so that they cover the unnecessary space. Other than that, I can tell the book is going to be a romance by looking at it.

Blurb: 6/10

There are a few grammar issues in the blurb that need to be addressed. As a whole, the book needs to be cleaned up, but I'll focus on the blurb for now. You did a good job introducing the main characters and conflict, which is crucial for a blurb to carry out. It isn't long or short; just right. It's also written in the present tense, which is preferred for a blurb. Overall, it's solid, but I gave you a lower score because of the grammar issues.

Plot: 7/10

The plot's a little cliché; a woman being forced into a marriage, she doesn't want to get married—but that doesn't mean that it's bad. I loved learning about all the Muslim terms and practices. But, there were many terms I wasn't used to, so I got a little lost. So, I had to refer to the "Before We Start" chapter to understand things further. You could benefit from slowing down the chapters a bit, allowing your audience—those who may not be familiar with Muslim culture—to get a better sense of it.

I became confused when scenes shifted, because I didn't know that a new scene had started. For example, at one point, we're in Selena's house, but the next, she's at school. Again, I had to search back to figure out where the scene changed. You can benefit more from these changes in scenes through context clues and line breaks.

Since the plot moves at a slower pace, I felt there was unnecessary information you could take out. If Selena is drowned in schoolwork, then why don't we have a few more scenes of her at her school rather than at home?

I'm assuming this book is supposed to be a slow burn, but I have to admit that sometimes I get a little bored. I like the plot a lot; it just needs to be sped up and we need more character development for the main characters so they're a little more interesting.

I'm assuming this book is supposed to be a slow burn, but I have to admit that there were times when I got a little bored. I like the plot a lot; it just needs to be sped up and we need more character development for the main characters so they're a little more interesting.

I'm assuming this book is supposed to be a slow burn, but I do have to admit that there were times when I got a little bored. I like the plot a lot; it just needs to be sped up and we need more character development for the main characters so they're a little more interesting.