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Facade

As mentioned earlier, this book has been reviewed based on the following criteria:

♠Title
♠Cover
♠Blurb
♠Grammar
♠Point of view execution
♠Story pacing
♠Writing style
♠Punctuation
♠ Character introduction

It also contains comments and ways the writer can better their work. If the review makes you want to read the book, go right ahead.

Title: Facade

Genre: Teen fiction

Writer: RhodaKadri

Review

Title: The title is fine. It's not normally the kind of title you'd see on teen fiction but it's okay.

Cover: The cover could be better. It's not really eye-catching.

Blurb: It needs to be worked on. It needs to be more intriguing. And from the blurb alone, the story felt a little cliche. New, poor, orphan girl gets a school at an elite school and has to deal with the school bully who will most likely be her love interest. I feel like I seen this storyline a lot.

Grammar: The book obviously needs editing because the writer tends to switch from present tense to past tense.

POV Execution: This was nicely done but the characters still need to have more distinct voices. I should be able to tell you've switched POV even if it wasn't indicated.

Story Pacing: I don't really like the pacing. You should keep the story moving forward, don't go back even if you've switched POV. Readers do not want to finish reading about the school morning assembly from Character A's POV and when they enter Character B's POV, you're taking them back to the beginning of the assembly again, even if they experienced it differently. Character B's POV should begin after the assembly since we already witnessed the assembly through Character A's eyes. If something significant had happened to Character B during the assembly that's important to the plot, find a way to mention it or include it while still moving forward.

Writing Style: The writing style was good, it was very much understandable. But I want to believe that the chapters I read was written a while ago and the writer has improved by now.

Punctuation: Punctuation needs a lot of work. Especially dialogue punctuations and the use of a comma when necessary.

Character Introduction: One thing I'm not really a fan of is mentioning so many characters all at once for the first time. Sorry, but I won't remember them along the way.

So rather than having another character pointing out a bunch of other characters and their names to your MC, let your MC observe for themselves and notice each characters peculiar behaviour or personality (way of talking, dressing, etc.) Then later on, your MC will learn that characters name and match them to their personality. For example, “I saw the same guy who was talking too much during the assembly again. I'd learned that his name was Eric.”

Overall, I know the book has a lot of potential. I can't speak about the entire plot but I know that with some editing, it'll be perfect. Well done.