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ALPENGLOW

This review is going to take a slightly different form since it's poetry. If the review makes you want to read the book, go right ahead!

Title: Alpenglow

Genre: Poetry

Writer: NeoKultured

Review

Poem 1.

I'll start with the flow of the poem. I feel something could be done about the enjambment. The poem flowed well up until the point where an ellipsis was used. Now in my opinion, the use of the ellipsis kinda disrupted the flow of the poem. You can imagine having this rhythm in your head and all of a sudden there are broken notes.

Yeah, it was something like that. The line following that didn't seem to give the same rhythm as the rest of the poem. I'm not really certain if it was the use of ellipsis that made the rest of the poem feel detached but the flow just felt off from that point.

The next thing I'll talk about is word choice. I feel it could have been better constructed to suit the flow and the rhythm of the poem. I think a few words could have been omitted in the third and fourth line or better still, it could have been rephrased.

Depending on what you were aiming for, something just didn't feel right about those two lines but then it's a personal opinion.

Personally, I like the first two lines. The descriptions of nature are vivid but I feel a better imagery could have been created.

Better attention could have been paid to sensory detail. Maybe that's just my predilection for prose speaking (someone once told me that I let it seep into my poetry) but then I still feel it could work here.

Just a line showing something. It could be the crispness of the leaves underneath the fingertips or the way parts of the leaves disintegrate on touch—nothing too verbose of course. But just enough to give a clear picture.

Overall the poem was simple. That didn't draw away the beauty but it could have been better.

Poem 2: This should be my favourite poem out of the five I read. I understand the writer's desire to store happiness so they always have it at their beck and call whenever they want to be happy.

The poem's central theme is the fleeting nature of small moments of joy.

I love the overall theme of the poem. It brings to light the fleeting nature of happiness. It's relatable and you did a good job in conveying the speaker's feelings.

I still feel the use of ellipsis was unnecessary (although this time it didn't disrupt the flow of the poem). I also love the simplicity here but a few poetic devices wouldn't kill.

I like how this poem reminds me to cherish the little things in life. To hold them close and never let go. But that said, I feel — like the first poem — you could have delivered it with better word choices and poetic devices. The use of ellipses in the fourth line was unnecessary, too.

Poem 3.

Let's just forget about telling you not to use the ellipsis in the penultimate line. Anyway, in this line, "and for me that's enough, because being with you is great.." I think you could have said this without saying it. In the sense that better word choices could have been used. To me, using this line kinda takes the poetry out of your poem. But then, I get the whole message the piece— it's beautiful.

I'll wrap up the rest of the reviews by saying this: you have pretty ideas and great potential. But then, you need to work on learning to use poetic devices and better choices of words. That's all.❤️