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4 | What Happened At Kate's House

Title: What Happened at Kate's House

Author: JasonTemple

Genre: Romance

Summary: 3 years ago, Steve slowly pulled out of his best friends,Kate and Amaya's, lives. They were popular, he wasn't, and he didn't feel like spoiling the budding relationship between Kevin and Kate.Time can change a lot of things though. So when Kate dumps Kevin and still throws the party he was planning, Steve decides he's going to go and try to reconnect with his two best friends and end his nights alone at home.Little did he know that his presence would stir up old feelings that the three thought were forgotten, and new feelings that hadn't even been uttered yet.

Sexual Content: No

Review made by: klutzymuskie

The cover is nice. It gives you the feeling that the book is mainly going to take place at some party, which does connect to the story. The cover is catchy too. It is easy to read and understand as the images are clear. Well, that's all I would like to say about the cover. 

I guess the beginning, the foreword was pretty good. It made you curious to read ahead. Especially the last paragraph, which isn't really a cliffhanger (which I hate, because I am very impatient) but isn't really an ending. It makes you wanna discover what happened to the guy.

I felt that the punctuation were to the mark, the commas and full stops were present wherever needed. The vocabulary was also great. I didn't feel like there was any grammar mistake, which of course is a great thing isn't it? or is it? 

Talking about the story line, I find it pretty interesting. Something new. But the chapters don't really connect. Its like the chapters are jumbled up. It is good that you are giving different point of views, but if that is done with proper structure, then it would be amazing. You don't really want your readers to get confused, which at times I got. The book is written in first person, which could be changed to third person as it would be easier to get the flow of chapters and switch the POVs. It is actually nice to have different point of views, but that is difficult to write and the main reason, the story isn't in flow. But, it's just my experience and view, I don't know if it is for a reason or not. Is it a short story or not? If it is then please change the genre of the book as it helps the readers to find a perfect book. If its not, then please add more details the book is too short. When a reader starts reading your book, it feels like it is a short story. Because there isn't much background info and the climax is at the very beginning.

Characters, now as a reader, I don't feel connected with the characters. Again that is because it gives you a feel of a short story. But even though it is or it isn't a short story, the reader should be able to connect with the characters. Otherwise, the characters are great. If you could just give a little bit of background information about characters.

Talking about the summary you have submitted. It sounds more like a synopsis than summary. But its fine, because many people can't write a good summary of their own book(including me). So, i guess thats all. Time for rating:

Cover: 9.9/10

Grammar: 10/10

Story: 9/10

Flow: 4.5/10

Characters: 6/10

 Summary: 6/10

General Rating: 7/10

That's all, hope you didn't find it offensive but helpful. Best of luck.

Love,

Muskan😁