|Title| I like it. It reminds me of a Shirbert video I saw on YouTube using the song called it. It works for the story. The only thing is I think it works for any story that involves romance. It kinda lacks any personal meaning, but I feel like it's hard to come up with names for Gilbert Blythe fanfics so this definitely works
|Cover| You couldn't ask for much more from the cover of a Gilbert Blythe Fanfic; a picture of Gilbert with the title on it. And it's a nice picture of Gilbert, it works as a cover and isn't just like, his face (as much as we would all enjoy that, haha). I haven't seen any other G. Blythe fanfics using the same image and the font fits it nicely. Overall I quite like the cover and wouldn't change it in any way (unless you want to, of course)
|Summary| I really like the summary. It's descriptive and gives you enough of the story for you to be interested, but doesn't give the whole plot away.
There's just one problem. The summary doesn't really seem to be describing the story I read. For one thing, where are the bullies? Yeah Josie kind of sniggers at her but I'd hardly call that bullying. On the contrary all the girls are quite nice to her (which is perfectly fine but your summary suggests otherwise). Now I would understand if the bullying happens in the future, but then you say something about her meeting Gilbert and suddenly she didn't hate school anymore; if anything Gilbert makes school worse! The summary makes it seem like as soon as Gilbert gets there everything is better. And while I like that Amelia doesn't like Gilbert right away, the summary suggests such. And it's okay to tease people with your summary trying to make them think that the story will go another way, but only hint at it. Your summary doesn't seem like it's teasing, only messing up the order of events in the story. So you might want to just tweak the summary a little bit. Obviously it's up to you but that is what I would do.
|Plot| To be perfectly honest I'm getting a little tired the a-new-girl-moves-to Avonlea-and-falls-in-love-with-Gilbert plot. It's kind of becoming the cliche of Gilbert Blythe fanfics. I can see the reason why (it's the easiest way to make them meet) but it's just used so often. I'm being a bit of a hypocrite here, I guess, because I myself have a Gilbert Blythe Fanfic where a new girl comes to town but . . . Yeah it's an incredibly popular plot theme. So if you want your story to be a little more unique, you might consider adding a twist to the idea. I did like that your character joins school after Anne. In a lot of fanfics they join school at the same time.
Okay now, her abusive mother. Abusive parents can be hard to read about but it is a real life problem and you've given her a reason to be abusive (her father and alcohol). Not that the reasons make it okay, but it just makes the story make more sense.
Now Amelia and Gilbert haven't had all that many interactions so far so I can't say much about that storyline, but you didn't have them declaring love in the first chapter so that's definitely good. Slow and steady is the way to go with relationships (as tempting as I know it is to rush ahead).
|Characters| So far Amelia's personality isn't really that clear. But I'm sure as the story continued it will come out more.
All the canon characters are written well.
I don't like Amelia's mom; she is so mean. But I think that's the point?
I like Timothy though. He's really cute.
|Originality| Like I said, the initial plot is becoming very overused. I think it's okay to use cliches in your stories, you just have to find a way to make them unique and interesting and exciting.
|Writing| It's easy to read and I didn't see any spelling problems or typos. But you keep switching in and out of present-tense and past-tense. This is very off-putting while reading a story. You sound stick to one or the other, unless you're referring to a past event in a present-tense story.
Also I'd like to see a bit more description.
|Questions| Does the plot pull you in? Yes and no. It isn't that your plot is bad, it just could use some spice like I've been saying throughout this review. Her family troubles definitely do pull you in. I really hope she gets s out of her current situation. Nobody deserves to be treated in such a way. So that aspect of the plot does pull you in. Are there any typos? I did not see any, so awesome job with that! Any thoughts on the future of the story? Well I definitely want to see her escape the hurt cast upon her by her mother, and am interested in seeing how Amelia and Gilbert's relationship plays out.
|Overall|
I think the story has potential it just needs a little tweaking and a bit more excitement. And you're only a few chapters in so you still have plenty of time to do this! I'll definitely keep up with the story and can't wait to see where you go with it.
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|Title| I love the song, but it isn't really creative like what fly said it lacks personal meaning.
|Cover| I like how the title is popping out and is eye catching to the readers.
|Summary| I like the summary, the secret pulls in people to read your book to find out. I also love the two quotes you added in the begin. Just maybe add that Gilbert wasn't friendly at first.
|Plot| The new girl is so cliche, but I like how she is similar to Anne in many ways like they were both abused and Gilbert was annoying them both.
|Characters| Amelia's personality isn't really there, but it seems like she's distant, in her own world. I think how you still made Anne hit Gilbert on the head, really brings out her personality.
|Originality| maybe if you add a plot twist to the story it would be more original!
|Writing| Your writing is good, but maybe be more descriptive
|Questions| yes, the summary pulls me in like I said people would read to find out the secret. No I didn't see a single typo I wanna see how would she deal with her abusive mother and people finding out and conflict with Anne and Amelia about Gilbert.
|Overall| I can't wait to continue reading on, keep up what you doing. Reviewed by Mrsjoyful
