Book Club Reviews #ProjectNigeria

REVIEWS

1. Humylash

Book : When my sorrow  was born

The story line is awesome, the cover is okay,  the title is eye catching which depicts tragedy.

I love  the book and the lessons inculcated  in it but you need to differentiate  the past from the present because it confuses  me at first.

There aren't  much errors that editing won't correct.

Your narrative power  is strong .

Looking forward  to an update notification  of the second  choice.

More ink to your pen admin.

2. eeesh_

Your title and Book cover are amazing. Also I love the Epigraph.

The plot is beautiful and relatable. I love how you have extracted life lessons from the actions of each and every character. In other words, it's the perfect definition of 'you reap what you sow.'

Your characters are soo real. Downright one of the things I loved about the book. Even the flat characters like Sylva found a way to connect with us, to stick to our memories. I had a direct connection with all the characters in the book and their unique traits.

Your narrative technique. Powerful. Brilliant. Captivating. The character narrates her story in such simple, yet powerful voice that rings in a reader's ears. I love your use of symbology and imageries. I love how the story is narrated in bits and pieces. It made it thrilling!

Unlike how others here have complained about how they got confused differentiating the Past from present, I actually had no problem with that. Because, I have noticed, instead of the conventional way of using italics or writing 'FlashBack', you have depicted it in a more brilliant manner. Like making someone talk to the narrator, hence bringing her out of her reverie.

Only I have a problem with that letter. Yes it should be in italics or other form. Yes you didn't tell us when it was finished. And who on earth is Beatrice? I haven't heard of her since the letter was couried. She SHOULD have been a significant figure in the character's life, in her past. Or better still, the letter should have been the eyes from which we see through the narrator's eyes.

Once, and towards the end of the story, the narrator mentioned a Yusuf whom she'd gotten married to (which I'm guessing should be a mistake and meant Isah), but if it isn't, then I have no idea who Yusuf is.

And aye, your dialogue punctuation should be inside your quotation mark and not outside. Little typographical errors there are all in all.

Your Short Story is Amazing and unique. I loved and enjoyed every bit of it. And I wish it was a full Novel!

More power to you. Keep writing.

3. Sarah_dat_hijabi

First of, book cover is lit. 👍🏼

It was amazing. The title was well depicted in the book, and to be honest, it was heart wrenching to read the sorrowful stories behind some of the women in the shelter.

Your grammar was good, each character had depths, which is something that I loved about it. It's filled with awareness too. You got me curious the way you introduced the past into the present and all, a great way to make the readers want to know exactly what happened. Plus the way the conversations and words have that writing flow to it, God, it's good.

" After every hardship comes ease" the story did depict that well.

Yeah, I did get confused about the Yusuf at the end too.

Great job, girl, great job.👍🏼

xoxo~Sarah

4. siriuslystyling

Book review by siriuslystyling

Author : @Rukayya Aadam

The book cover is okay it could be better though.  The title is intriguing cause you would like to know how exactly someone gives birth to her sorrow.
   The narration and dialogue were very good. There isn't much to edit.
  The story line is beautiful. I loved how you used flashbacks to help us understand what happened to her and why she was so sad.
In all the story is short and nice. Gets the point across well and also ends in a way I think we can all get a moral from.

5. RuthieEbun

When My Sorrow was Born

Hmm...before i start, lemme quickly tell you that, Miss.Painte you're a good writer.

Cover: The cover is a good one, i mean it isn't bad at all. It's a cover made by a graphics person, the picture could already portray the message. I could see the title reflecting on the cover.

Blurb: Simply and shortly. It's catchy and nice. Brief and meaningful.

What i like: Hmm...if you give me the whole of today, i won't finish at all. First, you barely had punctuation problem. Alot of people have that in writing, that was one of my major problems too, but i could barely find fault. Secondly, how you describe. Damn! You're good, it's like i was in the book with the girl. I could see everything, and almost feel it sef. But i be Nija babe, i no get overactive imagination. Lastly, your dialogue is good mehn. It's good, but...

Things i don't like: I was really flowing with your book, until i bumped into the first mistake. It pain me ehn, i could only see perfection. This mistake was how you ended your letter. I thought i was still reading the letter, until it clicked in my mind that you had continued. You should have either ended it like the way a letter is usually ended, but since you said she was going to finish it the next day, then you'd have either italised/italic it, or put it in the center. Secondly, instead of writing, then putting i thought. You should have just italised it. Finally, when communicating you use comma, and a small letter after it.
E. G
"Fatima is a queen," she said. ✔
"Fatima is a queen." She said. ✖

I hope you get, and if i came off rude in any way, I'm so sorry, i didn't mean it