"THE DEFENCE AGAINST THE DARK ARTS HAD AN IRON CHANDELIER HUNG FROM THE CEILING, AS WELL AS A DRAGON'S SKELETON. "
in which the admins review your stories.
note: this book is meant for us to give you our opinions of how you can improve your writing...
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TITLE 10/10: i couldn't imagine how you could change the title to be better
COVER 5/10: your cover has a lot going on, and it probably could be a bit neater. it's also pretty hard to read the font at the bottom where it says "short stories"
DESCRIPTION X/10: i won't count this towards your total because there technically is no description
FACE CLAIMS X/10: this will also not be counted towards your total since you have none
STORYLINE 8/10: it requires focus to read, but when you get into it, it's very interesting and I think you did a very good job expressing the emotions of the characters
BONUS 4/5, grammar: seemed perfect to me other than the occasional place where a comma might have made for clearer understanding
NOTES/ REVIEW: I really did enjoy it, the only advice I can give is to maybe try to make it a bit more clear and concise at some parts to make it easier to read. great character dynamics and, as I said, use of showing their emotions
