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Judge: Suga_Cane -
1. Abrasions by divinegukk
Title: 10/10 marks
Cover: The cover in my opinion is generally very 'clean' . There are no problems with it ; the title and the picture are clear and easy to read and the colours go well with each other.However it doesn't really fit with the theme of your book. An improvement would be to maybe add some darker aspects to the cover so that it would fit better with the story. Apart from that, it was very well made. 7/10 marks
Description:There is a description to the story which is good. I felt the description was a bit brief. Although it was short and snappy, it didn't convey a particular theme. I felt that it was a bit misleading as it didn't fit that much with the story (or at least the portion of the story that you have written).It maybe could have been a little more thorough. 5/10 marks
Writing:I couldn't spot any grammar or punctuation mistakes and the story seemed to flow very well ; it wasn't unnatural. The description has been done very well and makes it easy to visualise the story. It shows how easily the innocence of a child can be taken away by keeping them in a toxic environment. It honestly made me a bit teary reading it, so props for that I'm not at all an emotional person. 25/25 marks
Prologue and or first chapter:The prologue is creative and I love how putting the definition of the title name was almost foreshadowing what was going to happen in the story without spoiling it. 25/25
Plot:The plot is very well thought through. It's not to complicated yet it still has a lot happening. I think the plot is quite original. The only thing is I felt the introduction of Jimin was a teeny bit rushed. Apart from that it was very good.43/45 marks
Last chapter or Epilogue:The last chapter of the story (like the rest of the story) seemed to be very well thought out.It had a good amount of detail.25/25
Total: 140/150
2. I Remember by blinkocean
Title:It has a short and snappy title (that is easy to remember)and not an overused title which is good. It goes well with the plot of your book. 8/10
Cover:The cover was clean. The picture was clear and the title was very easy to ,read which is very important. I think that the colour scheme goes quite well with the theme of your book as the book seemed to be 'dark'. An improvement would be to add maybe a short quote on the cover, but apart from that it was pretty good. 9/10
Description:The description for this story is a bit brief but I think it works well for this story. However it would be a bit better if it could have outlined the theme of the plot a bit more.7/10 Writing:The writing style in this story was probably one of my favourite things. It had so much detail put into it. It uses a few advanced words but not too many which is very good.I couldn't spot any grammar or punctuation mistake but there were only a few phrases that could've been worded differently, for example "he travelled his eyes around the place".24/25
Prologue and or first chapter:The prologue was very well done. It used quotes from the story and had a definition added into it. I love how you formatted it as well. 25/25
Plot:The plot was very good in my opinion. The fact that the plot was slightly 'unclear' made the story sort of into a mystery for Taehyung and Jungkook to solve.44/45
