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Judge: LivingReverie
1. But I still want you by Crystal_TanJin
Title: Is a fairly common title, still gives a sense that one can progress. Try to think out of the box a bit. Dwell deeper into the purpose of the story to find the perfect title.6/10
Cover: The quality of pictures used is low, but it does give off a strong vibe. Till the 16th chapter, I don't see any relevance to the plot so far nor do the vibes match. Maybe as the story reaches its climax, the theme will make more sense.6/10
Description: detailed enough to give an understanding of the book, vague enough to intrigue the reader. A slight tweak in the wording would do, but otherwise a good job.9/10
Writing: interchanges past and present tense Can add a bit of "flavour" to the writing.Head hopping is seen, which is not preferred while writing in third person. Small grammatical errors, can easily be corrected with a bit of editing. For advice, I'd say, let the actions do the talking. Describe the body movements in a way that they convey the feelings. It comes out be more graphic, imaginable and professional.17/25
First chapter: not particularly interesting, but I believe the purpose of the chapter is to just introduce the reader to Jin's life and give an overall idea of how things are before the plot kicks in.15/25
Plot: Not exactly original, but not overused or seen exactly as it is portrayedplot progresses steadily. Good character development. Does have a bunch of fun chapters. Personally, I would have let Jin unravel the female lead's back story. Like leaving clues for the Jin to decipher rather than just plainly explaining it, so that the feeling of mystery behind the lead gives the thrill of the search. But that's just me. Other than that, the female lead's story gives her a good reason to be with Jin.40/45
Ending chapter (till 16th): The plot is at the mid, if I had to say. At this point, we can see developments in Jin's character and having known the female lead's story, it gives a better idea of what is happening. 20/25
Total: 113/150
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Judge: bangtanxsonyeontan
1.Emotions: LuYongxSope
Title: 4/10
Cover: 6/10
Description: 5/10
Writing: 20/25
Prologue(1st chapter): 22/25
Plot: 37/45
Epilogue(last chapter): 24/25
Total: 118/150
Comment: Ok, so your book is not that bad not that that "wow" neither. I suggest you make your title a little bit unique and creative at the same time? I mean your title is very plain and simple, "emotions". Also the description is not catchy for me like the first thing that came to my mind is the movie inside out lmao but overall I was impressed on the last part.
2. A series of unfortunate events by the_jelly
Title: 4/10
