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Review#4 : Forced To Be An Alpha

A sort of disclaimer for intolerant and butt hurt lads.

I recognize the time and effort of the writer and their dedication towards their work. I don't intend to insult or mock their work in anyway. I just intend to give an honest review of how I feel and see the book. My review wouldn't be applicable after they've edited their book, so don't be the dumbass that wages a war about my review being stupid. Definitely contains spoilers.

Title: Forced to be an Alpha

Author: @ Ayten_2004

Title and Cover - {7.5/10}

While the title doesn't stop me from reading the book, it doesn't really persuade me to read on.It is quite ordinary and dull.It doesn't entice me enough to read further.The only effect that the title had on me was a sigh. I feel it can definitely be turned into something better. The cover relates well to the book and does attract my attention to some extent. I feel some more effort needs to be put in the title to make it more unique.

Blurb/Summary - {4/10}

While reading the blurb, one major problem that definitely stood out was improper sentence structure and formation. Most of the sentences can be broken into 3-4 lines.I even felt the way in which the blurb was written wasn't enticing and the lines were placed in wrong positions. There are few mistakes in the tenses used and commas have been used in place of full stops at several points.

Now, if we come to the thought of the blurb, it wasn't thrilling, mysterious or adventurous enough to draw me into the story. The vibe that you tried to go for didn't come through. It was just rather dull. The last line did add a little humour and was a saving grace, though it was terribly cliché.

It didn't make your story seem any better than any other of the same genre.To make it a little better, I'd suggest you to think of something that would truly excite the reader to read a story and maybe , you can see all the hooks of your story, and find a better blurb.The blurb was rather dull and clichéd.

Grammar and Vocabulary - {3/10}

I would request you to really focus on sentence formation, its structure and general grammar. Writing in caps to assert shouting is fine in text messages, but not really acceptable in books. In books, we just say 'she shouted', 'she yelled' or 'she howled at her'. Using capital letters to show that just looks weird in a book. Another thing would be to capitalize the beginning of each sentence.