Alternate Book Reviews

Review#6 : Alpha Deimos

A sort of disclaimer for intolerant and butt hurt lads.

I recognize the time and effort of the writer and their dedication towards their work. I don't intend to insult or mock their work in anyway. I just intend to give an honest review of how I feel and see the book. My review wouldn't be applicable after they've edited their book, so don't be the dumbass that wages a war about my review being stupid. Definitely contains spoilers.

Note: The author hasn't proof read and all the remarks related to grammar have been discussed in the 'Vocabulary and Grammar' section.

TITLE: Alpha Deimos

Author: riyafarewell

Title and Cover - {5/10}

The title wasn't interesting or wasn't really helpful. It neither interested me in the book nor represented the book. It is just the name of the protagonist and there is nothing else special about it. If I see this name randomly, there is nothing in it that will actually attract me to read the book or demand my attention. A title more reflective of the book can be used.

The cover is okay; I wasn't amazed by it or attracted to it. It wasn't drawing my attention but it wasn't stopping me from reading the book. The cover can be improved and made more suitable. I guess it is still in a manner related to the book.

Blurb/Summary - {3/10}

Let's talk about the blurb in terms of the ideas and the plot first. The blurb sounds fairly typical frankly. I couldn't find anything different or new in it. It all seems rather monotonous, clichéd and seems like repetition of a story that has been written about a million times. Even the werewolf version of this story has been done a million times over. After reading the blurb, it feels like the same old story that honestly, I would skip reading because it is boring and well not that good.

In fact, the characters after a glance of the summary seem like the standard characters of a novel of this genre. The girl is always sacrificing and then, she will stand up for herself somewhere in the story or something. It seems a little uninteresting to me. On the basis of this summary, I would judge the book and wouldn't give it chance.

Now, let's talk about the grammar and vocabulary side of the blurb. The articles are a little misplaced and sometimes, omitted. For instance, it should be 'the' Blue Moon pack. Also, only the first letter would be capitalized as it is a proper noun and instead of repeating alpha, you could have written that he is the head of the pack. Redundancy never helps a story!

The next line isn't grammatically correct again. The line, "he is not in the plan...." is not only filled with grammatical errors but doesn't make any sense. I didn't really understand what you exactly meant by it. I would suggest proof reading the blurb as it is filled with errors in terms of tenses, articles, capitalization, sentence formation and conjunctions.

The vocabulary used was quite basic and there wasn't any focus on making description of the setting of this book, though I hope for it in the book.

In conclusion, the blurb has a negative impact on the readers instead of a positive one.

Grammar and Vocabulary - {3/10}

I feel the grammar definitely requires a lot of work and is a barrier for readers. The sentence structure is not right and the parts of speech haven't been used appropriately. It takes away from the readers' experience. It would require a lot of editing and proof reading for the book to be readable. The punctuation and conjunctions are wrongly placed or missing. Frankly, it is an English teacher's nightmare. The vocabulary used is pretty basic and standard and no efforts has been made by author to use better, more descriptive words or enhance the reading experience in that sense.