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Review #11: Mimi's Guide to Definitely Not Being Kidnapped by Faeries

A sort of disclaimer for intolerant and butt hurt lads.

I recognize the time and effort of the writer and their dedication towards their work. I don't intend to insult or mock their work in any way. I just intend to give an honest review of how I feel and see the book. My review wouldn't be applicable after they've edited their book, so don't be the dumbass who wages a war about my review being stupid. Definitely contains spoilers.

TITLE: Mimi's Guide to Definitely Not Being Kidnapped by Faeries

Author: _Sanguine

Title and Cover - {6/10}

The title is interesting and amusing. The cover, however, is a little simplistic and doesn't catch your eye. So, I would suggest more work on that to make it stand out.

Blurb/Summary - {6.5/10}

The blurb is interesting and seems accurate of the story. It doesn't reveal the entire story but does make me wonder a bit of about clichés that start like this. On a more constructive note, adding some humour to the blurb might reflect the story better. Overall, the blurb is precise.

Grammar and Vocabulary - {8/10}

Sentence composition as well as grammar in some places can be improved. It works perfectly for the rest of the chapter.

Flow and Pace of the Story - {7/10}

The story flows beautifully for the most part, except the long expository paragraphs without any movement. The story is mostly well-paced, however, slows down unnaturally, as it did in chapter 2, which can be improved.

Detail/Description - {8.5/10}

The story describes the scenery and setting of conversations perfectly and gives you amazing visualization cues. Again, expository paragraphs and some weird quirks in the protagonist's monologue which don't serve as humour can be tweaked.

Overall Story - {8/10}

The story is unique, lighthearted and interesting. It explores an adventure as it promised and has enough intrigue to draw you in. The humour and pacing do require some work, rest is beautifully captured. The story is similar to most adventure tales but still seem to hold your attention.

Cliffhangers - {7/10}

The cliffhangers, though not entirely suspenseful, do push me forward to read ahead and find what happens next. They have been adequately used. It creates intrigue on how the adventure shapes ahead. All chapters don't end in a cliffhanger but do end up having a bigger question overall.

Originality - {8/10}

The story is original in its own sense; however, some classic clichés of fantasy do follow it. However, they have been beautifully framed.

Character Development - {7/10}

The protagonist does entail some clichéd characteristics, but these have been represented in a fresh manner. Some of the internal monologue and the phrasing around the glances exchanged between Quinn and Celeste seems awkward and forced and can be smoothened.

Overall Score: 66/90

Chapter Feedback

Chapter -1

The first half of the chapter though well written, takes a deep dive into exposition through the main character's monologues, making it a little dull and deep to start off. I would suggest adding more movement into such long drawn expository paragraphs as it adds more to the story and makes it interesting. Sentence composition as well as grammar in some places can be improved. The story is quite interesting in the way develops tension over a ring of mushrooms and the pacing is good, however, it can be improved as it slows down in some parts. The first chapter is summarized beautifully in a cliffhanger.

Chapter -2

The story is developed swiftly as we explore their adventure ahead. The chapter doesn't end in a cliff hanger but creates a potent one in terms of what does this faerie king want. However, it does seem a bit easy to guess. The humour I felt was amusing in some places but didn't work in most, which would definitely be one thing I'd suggest on improving. The pacing, while it felt slow in some places, was adequately paced for the rest.