Half of the Kingdom(ft. commentary)

~Nov 1

I had only  a very loose idea for what I wanted to do with this story and it shows in the first day I was writing. Much of it is pointless and cringe.

It was a beautiful day in the kingdom and her father was coming home! That thought was foremost in Miryanna's mind as she skipped down the corridor, unheedful of the onlooking stares. She reached the passageway that led to the battlements and ran all the way to the top. From up there, she could see the almost the whole city laid out before her. She raised a hand to shade her eyes from the sun and gazed out longingly, wishing to be out in the city amongst the people instead of stuck in the castle awaiting her father there. She wanted to be the first person he saw when he came in the gate. But that was not to be. Her aunt, the queen, insisted that she stay and wait like a lady, and while Miryanna was usually just fine with that, today, seeing her father was her top priority.

Okay not so bad. Upbeat and happy. Yay. Is it explicitly clear yet that I had n o i d e a w h a t i w a s d o i n g w i t h t h i s s t o r y . _ .

She was distracted from her thoughts as another person came up the stairs. But this was no guard or average person, as their rich clothing and tiara attested. This was the princess of the kingdom, Miryanna's cousin.

Establish that Miryanna is a member of the royal family. Check.

"Oh, there you are," She exclaimed as soon as she saw Miryanna perched up there.

"Hey, Nynesi, were you looking for me?" Miryana said in response.

"Well, as a matter of fact, mother is looking for you, but she made me join her in her quest." was her cousins response.

"Alright," Miryanna says and jumps down to the ground and follows her cousin down the stairs and to find the queen.

The ran into almost in to her as they were walking down the corridor.

"Oh, there you two are," she said as she saw them. "Now Miryanna, I know you're excited about you father coming home, and I don't blame you one bit, but could you please try to remember that you're seventeen and not twelve?" She asked.

Miryana bit her lip, somewhat ashamed of how she had been acting. Somewhat, but not quite.

Don't get me wrong, I do like Miryanna. I haven't connected with her like I have other ocs, but I do like her. When writing this, I wanted to find a happy medium between 'ugh everything girly is dumb" and "absolutely must be the most perfect little lady and all times". She's fine with being a normal person with big dreams.

"You're right, aunt, I'm sorry, but I'm still really excited!" She responded, doing little hops on her toes.

The queen laughed. "Well as I said, I don't blame you one bit for being excited. I know when I my father came home after a long journey there was practically nothing that could stop me. But still," she said growing serious again, "you want to show you're father that you're mature enough to stop behaving like a child. Else, how will you convince him to let you go with him one day?"

Miryanna sighed, "I guess you're right." And the trio continued down the hallway on their way to the throne room.

They entered and went straight to the throne on which the king was sitting.

"Ah, there you three are," He said, a smile on his face. Although sometimes times were hard in the kingdom, and he had to make tough decisions often, the king always seemed to find a reason to smile. Miryanna admired that about her uncle.

She smiled back and her aunt replied. "Yes, we're all here. Now what time did you say Dominic would be returning? It must be at least past noon by this time.