Overall I was satisfied with the story. The story-line was quite catchy but there were a few minor mistakes which will be easy to fix.
The GOOD:
1: The characters are well developed, and have a lot of personality.
2: The story-line kept me going on. I ended up reading 5 chapters!
3: The chapters were short, so they weren't boring.
4: overall it's worth a read!
THE BAD:
1: There were minor grammar mistakes, mostly the absence of full stops and question marks. I suggest reading the chapters again, correcting them as you go.
2: The synopsis of the book was way too long, and gave away too much information. I can already tell the ending. Shorten it up, about 12 sentences at most, and begin a new paragraph every now and then (even if the first paragraph of the synopsis is just 3 lines)
3: Again, grammar. This time, it's the slang. Don't slack off! put the remaining letters in 'pls' and make it 'please.'
4: Spacing. The words looked all crammed up. Again, start new paragraphs after at least 6 or 7 lines (if necessary, you can make it longer.)
5: The cover. Probably the most important part. Go to a nice cover shop on Wattpad, and they'll help you make a decent cover.
RATING:
I'll rate it 8.5 out of 10. Because of all the things. You can easily make it a 10, though.
*Also, I have added a payment (since criticism is hard work) in the previous chapter. Please do it.
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RandomHey guys! The title says it all. I can read your books for you and point out the goods and bads. Don't give up, keep writing!
